Going Home

The path leading home is a narrow road More so if you do not know the way. The burden of many years a heavy load As mirages of memories dance and sway. I teeter on yesterday's sheer abyss Avoiding the solid boulders of time. Afraid that unknown turn-offs I'll miss For yesterday's roads have no reason or rhyme. The road back home moves over treacherous terrain Winding through the lonely corridors of my heart. Black crows keep pecking at my sickly brain As the descent into yesterday rips me apart. The road back home is desolate and bare The landscape so foreign and unknown. Easy to lose my way,easy not to care For yesterday's promises are tossed and blown. The road leading home is one of defeat A journey searching for fragments of me. For reality can simply not compete With the illusions I call my memory. Home is where the heart is, so they say, Between self and heart lies many years. The heavy toll simply too much to pay For the way back home is obscured by tears.

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John Loving Iii

Date: 9/20/2008 5:36:00 AM

You are the ultimate! this piece took me to football fields on the losers team and i felt it. and i wanted to feel it. i wanted tears to flow and this piece gently lead me to my place of reliefe. we shared. John H Loving III

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 9/10/2008 8:56:00 AM

This poem made me feel sad. Beautifully written and it touched my heart. Excellent job. God BLess Phul

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 9/3/2008 3:21:00 PM

This is an excellent poem. It reminds me of Robert Frost's poem "The Road Less Traveled." I like the message and how theme is linked throughout the piece. Great job! ~Joseph

Adell Foster

Date: 8/27/2008 9:56:00 AM

Heidie, this is a very poignant write, which touched the heart of this reader greatly as reading the reflections of the soul searching to find the way home… It is not always an easy task yet I pray that we all learn to follow the pathways guided of His light in order that we may truly find our way home… Thank you for sharing such a precious write. God’s Love and Many Blessings, Always, Adell

Deneen White

Date: 8/26/2008 4:04:00 PM

Hi heidi, i love this write and the way that it flows, i feel as if I am there, and I feel the raw pain and despair, and thanks for your welcome comments, take care D-nyce

James Foulk

Date: 8/23/2008 4:45:00 PM

yes well written very well said, enjoyed it. thank you for reading my Whistling swan and for your comment.

Ed Coet

Date: 8/23/2008 10:36:00 AM

Well written and very introspective poetry. Life is full of peaks and valley's but collectively, it's all life. Perhaps my poem "In To The Night" would better explain what I mean. If inclined, give it a read. -ED-

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/23/2008 7:23:00 AM

Sometimes it's best to only look ahead....the horizon quite often has more sunshine! Thoughtful, heart-rendering poem!.....God Bless....Carrie

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 8/16/2008 2:40:00 PM

Hedi so sad but I understand you oh so well the road is long but the bumps grow smallers! Peace Great write, Laura :)

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 8/15/2008 8:34:00 AM

Tough road to follow. The journey takes us in many directions. Good write. Vince

Deneen White

Date: 8/13/2008 6:41:00 PM

thanks Heidi, for the kind words, take care D-nyce

Michael Jordan

Date: 8/13/2008 10:57:00 AM

Heidie - This is one of my favorite poems I have ever read - Such a truthful message written in a very beautiful way - You speak with such open honesty that it just melted every bit of my heart - I thank you for kind comments on my poetry and friendship - May God Bless you

Curt Mongold

Date: 8/12/2008 4:05:00 PM

Thank you.

P Sheart

Date: 8/12/2008 11:15:00 AM

Hello Heidie I think we all look back on our childhood differently. I feel a deep sense of sadness and longing for things to have been different for you in someway. I think within this outstanding poetic write you managed to bring all your feelings together to create something very enduring within your heart. I truly enjoyed the heartfelt honesty of this incredible write. All your readers will be able to relate to this in someway or another. Love Light Truth Patricia

Date: 8/11/2008 3:34:00 PM

Such a sad but heartfelt poem. The rhyme works well to convey your thoughts. Much to think about here. Blessings to you for sharing your talent with us. Karen

Michael Degenhardt

Date: 8/11/2008 11:48:00 AM

Your words are clear in the meaning they are to convey and the tone is soft while the a,b,a,b rhyme scheme stays perfect. Very well written. Michael

Sharon Winter

Date: 8/11/2008 4:48:00 AM

Well, everyone has commented so well on this outstanding poem, which is brilliant in it's writing and difficult in it's content, as I suppose we can all relate in some way. It perhaps is a sadder and different story for you,as I feel such a weight and almost hopelessness behind your words. Dear Heidie, hope you find your way, and I hope the road is not as obscured as you fear. Sorry I am so late with this comment. In the midst of some darker times myself. Love you, Shar

Deneen White

Date: 8/10/2008 3:24:00 PM

What a self relection of one self, sad and reflective, yet a great write yours usually are, take care Heidi, I hope hat all goes well

Daver Austin

Date: 8/10/2008 5:10:00 AM

Great poem. Thomas Wolf said it, "You can't go home again." I say, "Don't go home again." There's just too much B.S. along the way. I've learned to grab at right now, but the past continues to haunt. This poem is a 10. Love, daver

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 8/10/2008 3:55:00 AM

I love the 11th and 12th lines, perfect discription there. I know all too well of what you write, for my home is not my home anymore, either...I ran away from its hold on me to escape pain, and now I miss it terribly...so hard, this life - well written love Kristin

Brian Strand

Date: 8/10/2008 12:41:00 AM

Like the kyrielle touches that lead the reader through your excellent poem Heidie/Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

Taylor Harris

Date: 8/9/2008 10:35:00 PM

Amazing write Heidie, Its hard to get home when your so far away once youve lost the way and it does hurt along the ride i and many i know can relate to this poem. keep up the great work

Ronald Bingham

Date: 8/9/2008 8:35:00 PM

Heidie, what is the old saying you can never go home again especially when we have lost our way. This sounds like someone with w bittersweet childhood. A little on the dark side but a beautiful write, Blessings my friend, Ron P.S. Thanks for reading and commenting on my poetry.

Sara Lokken

Date: 8/9/2008 5:54:00 PM

Amazing poetry, Heidi--I can relate to that. So much depth and introspection in this also. But we are greater, the light in us is greater that any past that we may have---may you use it to light your own way. You deserve that. Beautifully written, just brilliant. Love, Sara

James Foulk

Date: 8/9/2008 4:56:00 PM

I like the line home is where the heart is loved since i first heard it many years ago. you wrote a great piece here, it was a very warm, tender, poem. thank you for reading my A Dusty Road and for your comment.