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Final Moment

When I closed my eyes, then back open. You stood there, with arms wide open. Like an angel, sent from above. You showered me with your undieing love. You held me close, and softly kissed my forehead. Told me, " It's now time for bed. Dream, dream, my princess. Rest your head. Then with a sign, I gently closed my eyes. Taking one last breath. I slowly died.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 6/26/2013 5:14:00 PM
Very deep....liked it...congratulations
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Date: 6/22/2013 10:53:00 PM
Nicely written, I would consider this poem 'Free Verse', because it is poetic without using rhyme or meter. The piece has excellent syntax, making it a fluid read while using powerful language. Great work!
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Date: 6/22/2013 12:49:00 PM
Well done! Congrats and thanks for submitting. Kim
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Date: 6/22/2013 11:36:00 AM
Congratulations. Joyce
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Date: 6/22/2013 9:30:00 AM
Unique perspective.... Great entry... Congratulations on your win.... Jake
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Date: 6/20/2013 4:17:00 PM
Gloria congratulations on your excellent win. I look forward in reading more of your poems. Welcome to PS. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 6/20/2013 1:47:00 PM
Hi Gloria, ;-) Congratulations!!! Thank you for entering one of my latest contest. please enjoy all the other winners who took their time in entering the same contest you did. you can find the list on the -Contest Winners: Member area- or you can visit my newest blog called ""from HEART to HEART ..."" stop by if you like. always & forever *LINDA
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Date: 6/19/2013 1:50:00 PM
a very deep poem Gloria, . Dropping in with a nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I’m here to invite you on over to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* please consider my contest* hopefully you find this place to be the comfort zone your pen is looking for. If you ever need or seek feedback on a certain poem, click on my name any time you like. I’m looking forward in following you and your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy this community; we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend Linda
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Date: 6/19/2013 9:14:00 AM
This was really a good piece.Thanks for sharing your lovely mind,welcome on board.
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Date: 6/19/2013 8:02:00 AM
Hello Gloria, this is a very nice and awesome free verse poem I like the flow :-) Stopping by with a nice and sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup fan....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 6/19/2013 5:12:00 AM
Hey, Gloria! - Pleased to read your first poem in the P-Soup! - You write very well. - Welcome to P-Soup, hope you will get much pleasure from sharing your thoughts and words here with us :) - Here it is: give to get, comments - then you will get feedback on your writing - I love get feedback on what I write. - Wish you luck my "new friend" - Have fun with poetry! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/18/2013 9:45:00 PM
Hi Gloria! Everything down is good! Keep on!
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