Feather

Floating through the trees On the current of the wind Soaring to freedom Mounting to the sky Drifting slowly back again Smoothly descending Dancing with the leaves Swirling in a light whirlwind Spiraling downward Completely silent Falling from heaven to earth Softly lands below Paused for a moment Swept up in a gentle breeze No longer in sight Copyright © 2009 Lena “Lolita” Townsend

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Tulisha Blackshear

Date: 4/15/2009 8:47:00 PM

i love this piece. I could invision myself as a feather floating, dancing in the breeze, up then down again. Wonderful and refreshing. can't wait to read more of your beauty.

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 4/12/2009 7:23:00 PM

Beautifully constructed.

Raul Moreno

Date: 4/11/2009 5:33:00 PM

Beautiful imagery, I love the flow of this piece...Raul

John E Wordslinger

Date: 4/6/2009 11:48:00 AM

I love the fourth one, very good, it's hard to do haiku, you did a great job at it, :)

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 4/6/2009 9:59:00 AM

Beautifully produced...looking forward for more haiku to read...all the best.

Brian Strand

Date: 4/6/2009 8:19:00 AM

Ae L'nass says an exqisite poem.Like the movement here Lolita.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

L'Nass Shango

Date: 4/6/2009 7:40:00 AM

Exquistely done, form and flow, words and images bring the title into view. Inspired! My peace to your house and you

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/4/2009 9:25:00 AM

You paint such a beautiful picture of a feather's journey "from heaven to earth." A calm, soothing, rewarding read! Love, Carolyn

Brian Strand

Date: 4/4/2009 9:02:00 AM

Thank you for your blog comment today Lolita.Rgds Brian

Belinda Parish

Date: 4/3/2009 11:01:00 PM

My first thought was picturing the feather on the movie 'Forrest Gump'..I always thought that was a neat special effect..Wonderful write Lena

Cecil Hickman

Date: 4/3/2009 10:55:00 PM

a beautifully written piece i could see the feather and your words reminded me of the feather floating in the movie Forest gump, a vision to read and brought beautiful pictures into my mind,,blessings and Thank you my dear for the generous words you left after reading my piece,,blessings...cecil

Date: 4/3/2009 4:30:00 PM

Nice use of this series for a peaceful feeling poem. Enjoyed it! Karen

Michaela Payne

Date: 4/3/2009 8:56:00 AM

Very light and smooth, I felt as if I was floating with the feather. Beautiful poem. Blessings, ~Michaela~

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 4/3/2009 7:12:00 AM

Very sweet. Has that light feeling in the tone as well as the feather itself. Also seems very dreamlike. Just add the theme song from Forrest Gump and the image is complete for me:) Thanks Lena - Yoni

Frank F. Atanacio

Date: 4/3/2009 7:08:00 AM

i light--hearty poem well done

Carrie Richards

Date: 4/3/2009 7:06:00 AM

Lovely poem, Lena....makes one want to float away like that feather! ~ Soothing poem!! love, Carrie

Christopher Higgins

Date: 4/3/2009 6:05:00 AM

This is a beautiful series of haiku's that form this wonderfully written piece. You made this feather alive...love the ending to this piece..thanks for the all the kind words from you...they make me float like a feather.

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/3/2009 5:58:00 AM

absolutely breathtaking! Lena! well done! Jim