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Fault Line

It must have been April when we both strayed Vindictive, I refused to warm fire’s glow When bitter words raged and triggered my ire ; Though pleading sorry, I shunned Kate’s hello. Yet at nights when laughter used to ripple, I knew this bile of pride kept us apart And missed all our years graced by friendship’s bliss; Enduring rains and snowstorms of life's chart. On Kate’s door I knocked to offer true peace... How my eyes burned like splinters of dark ray; She had gone -- far off--- my amends too late Realizing a void...on her birthday. 11/25/2016 Anthony Slausen’s Fault Line Contest

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Doug Vinson

Date: 12/1/2016 4:50:00 PM

7. This is such a good read! There is more there than I can put my finger on, and so let's say it is some miraculous quality. Not only that, but it's consistently that way, all the way through. Nette, you are prodigious! How do you do so many poems, and so well?

Joanna Daniel

Date: 11/30/2016 10:40:00 PM

How we all wish we were more careful with our words!! A beauty, Nette:) can't explain this situation any better:)

Heidi Sands

Date: 11/26/2016 3:41:00 PM

Oh So sad, Nette. I bet many can relate to this with situations they have faced.

Laura Leiser

Date: 11/25/2016 6:22:00 PM

Such a sad, but well expressed poem that I could totally relate to, Nette. I have a friendship that went astray in similar fashion. We still are in a rift... Good write, 7.

Chris Green

Date: 11/25/2016 8:30:00 AM

These things do happen a difference of opinion, touching a nerve and then setting off in a direction we wish we hadn't. Nicely expressed Nette, good luck in the contest

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/25/2016 6:36:00 AM

Nette, Reads like a winner for the contest..Creative way to go about the theme.. Thanks for stopping by and taking time to read and comment on my work..I hope that this is a great day for you!! Sara

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/25/2016 3:54:00 AM

I have had a few friends move on it really hurts to lose them. I guess it is the workings of the universe, it makes me hope that we will meet up in the afterlife. I really related to this wonderfully written poem Nette. I hope it does well. : )

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/25/2016 3:24:00 AM

- A touching theme in a beautiful poem, Nette - Good luck in the contest - Best wishes for a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paloma P

Date: 11/24/2016 9:25:00 PM

Intriguing take on the theme, I'm not sure if she dies on that day, I could be dead wrong, but that was my perception. Interesting Nette, good luck.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/24/2016 9:08:00 PM

So heartfelt and beautiful, I think we all deserve second chances, especially with friends, when we realize the true value one hopes one or the other will reach out with a hand of kindness!

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 11/24/2016 3:06:00 PM

I find...no fault but perfection dear, nette! Marvelously done! Good luck and a seven!

Franco Gonza

Date: 11/24/2016 2:57:00 PM

Pride or ego causes us to fall into a fault trap yet your impeccable poem has a value of transformation in it. You always take the theme less traveled!