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'exhale'

realization hit me it was never about him the controls were in my hand reverie was mine I had to take it try and alter the ending starting with my heart my thoughts became mine again I could finally exhale (Dodoitsu & Tanka) Inspired by Russell’s Sivey’s contest: “A Mesh of Forms” Written by Wilma Neels

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 4/10/2012 2:39:00 PM
Wilma, congrats on your win with this wonderful write! Love, Kim
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Date: 4/10/2012 12:10:00 PM
Congratulations on your super win in Russell's "A Mesh Of Forms" contest Wilma. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/9/2012 11:47:00 PM
Fabulous Wilma!!! Congratulations on your well deserved win my friend...such beautiful flow...big huggsss,love deb
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Date: 4/9/2012 6:59:00 PM
Very nicely said. Congratulations on a great win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/9/2012 5:29:00 PM
Wonderful and nice piece,Wilma....Hmm..touchy...Congrats on your win...
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Date: 4/9/2012 1:58:00 PM
Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 4/9/2012 8:46:00 AM
congrats Wilma on a superb win for this eloquent mesh of forms ..so well written ..luv.. so enjoyed..
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Date: 3/20/2012 11:57:00 AM
Good luck n the contest. A thoughtful poem with deep meanings.
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Date: 3/18/2012 2:50:00 PM
Meshed beautifully Wilma; an emotion that begs to be felt by the reader. All the best in the contest!
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Date: 3/18/2012 7:09:00 AM
You have written pure art here... Fav it is my dear muse... luv n hugs Michael
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Date: 3/14/2012 4:47:00 PM
again such wondrous feeling one recieve when reading you inspiring poems. harry. good luck.
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Date: 3/11/2012 10:29:00 PM
Hi Missy, very cool how you combined these two forms, way to go for you :)-- I love what you say here, caught myself just holding my breath here-- then just letting it all out....breathe, breathe, breathe, yes sometimes we just have to realize this--- mwahugs
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Date: 3/11/2012 7:56:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your poem this evening. Two forms I've never tried. hmmmmm
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Date: 3/11/2012 5:30:00 PM
Now about your poem, this is just WONDERFUL. I sure hope I can do as well. You have melded the two forms with an awesome idea and the ending is stunning.
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Date: 3/11/2012 5:29:00 PM
first, about the girl"friend" I have to tell you, she was the leader of the clique and everyone did what she wanted. she just didn't want me in with her group, but it is such a small thing looking back on it. I have gained so many friendships of great value since the sixth grade!!
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Date: 3/11/2012 3:07:00 PM
Nice piece.l°? hope ?† does well in Ð_???° contest.
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