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Evoking Hurricanes

They paused neath a tortured moon whence delusions met ocean tides, eliciting a volatile hurricane's vortex masking intentions in the sand, whilst escaping horizons surrender under disillusionment of passion in posthaste of sunlit warnings hidden amidst clandestine shadows, wherein night no longer shaded love CONTEST 247 any form - Brian Strand

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White Wolf

Date: 12/12/2016 6:46:00 PM

A great win with a phenomenal poem, Paloma! Excellently done!

Paloma P
Date: 12/15/2016 8:53:00 AM

Much appreciated Rick!

John Hamilton

Date: 12/12/2016 12:07:00 PM

Great writ Pal, congrats on a great win!

Paloma P
Date: 12/15/2016 8:53:00 AM

Thanks John!

Chris Green

Date: 12/12/2016 6:53:00 AM

I really loved this poem, the meaning, the desires are so deep, even beneath a tortured moon. Perhaps because it is so far away it can't join in but it certainly can illuminate the rendezvous. Beautiful crafted Paloma.

Paloma P
Date: 12/15/2016 8:52:00 AM

What a charming review, thanks Chris.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 12/12/2016 6:18:00 AM

I agree w/Victor. Couldn't said it any better. Your poetry is very sublime, full of metaphorical imagery and emerald glinted visions. Well I did have to add my own little tweak to Victor's assessment. Love this poem, it's sooo off-synch romantic, I think. Love your work as always, dear. Much love and best wishes to you.

Paloma P
Date: 12/15/2016 8:52:00 AM

You're too kind Freddie, thanks so much.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 12/10/2016 7:41:00 PM

Another Wow from me. The metaphor, she runs deep in this one. Truly a beaut of a job, the imagery and symbolism absolutely rock! Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Paloma P
Date: 12/15/2016 8:51:00 AM

Merci beaucoup CayCay!

Doug Vinson

Date: 12/10/2016 6:26:00 PM

Torture that mOOn, beat on it, hammer on it, hammer away, hammer hammer hammer - hammered silver can be so beautiful.

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/10/2016 7:05:00 PM

Well, I didn't, but if I had to come up with a reason, I'd say because you've been raging against existence for a good while. Not saying you don't have good reasons, either.

Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 6:49:00 PM

Why do you think I'm so tuckered out?

Tim Smith

Date: 12/10/2016 3:46:00 PM

What a powerful image you created Paloma...I can see the vortex in the midst of passion

Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 6:48:00 PM

Thanks Tim, glad you did.

Phil Capitano

Date: 12/10/2016 3:29:00 PM

Really cool ~ " a tortured moon", love that.

Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 6:48:00 PM

Flipped, I was leaning that way, thanks for your input, who knows, it might go back, it's a woman's prerogative to change her mind. ;)

Phil Capitano
Date: 12/10/2016 4:06:00 PM

I don't want to tell any poet how to write and I can see the image both ways ~ having said that I might be tempted to flip them but its your call. ???

Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 3:38:00 PM

Thanks so much Phil, I thought of transposing night and love after I posted, but I can't make up my mind. :)