Escape

Escape Stiff neck won't move this mornin'--"Ouch!" Must come from sleepin' on the couch. But why go sleep in that big bed All by myself (a thought I dread)? It's not as lonesome here--instead-- False comfort and illusion wed. For this I can so often vouch... My only price, is just this--"Ouch!" 2006©deborah burch

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Deborah Burch

Date: 4/11/2012 9:50:00 PM

lol, I like the way you think Ruben ;) yours is a good take on my write...thank you...but no, dissappointingly I was running...true queen of d'nile...(that's another one...;) Big Huggss my friend...thank you for stopping by ...I am honoured,love deb

Ruben Ramos

Date: 4/11/2012 9:34:00 PM

Is it escape or is it coming closer to self? On the couch I am with my self. Not a bad place to be, the couch. Especially when the rest of the world seems less inviting. A stiff neck keeps us facing forward.

Deborah Burch
Date: 4/11/2012 9:54:00 PM

Ruben I wrote you a comment ...check out the 5th,6th lines for a clue ;) also....love ,deb

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/14/2012 8:00:00 AM

Good morning ;-) deborah good luck in contest you have a winner here , thank you for sharing your wonderful poem. Have yourself a good one*always~pd"

Deborah Burch
Date: 3/14/2012 3:24:00 PM

Thank you soooo much pd!! You sound grrrate today ;) I so appreciate your encouragement...biggg hugggss~Deb~

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 3/14/2012 6:53:00 AM

Love the way you described the ouch here - being inside your head :) good luck in the contest!

Deborah Burch
Date: 3/14/2012 3:29:00 PM

Thank you Susan...lol yes my head is quite the ~enigma~hugggss~Deb~Good luck to you as well!!! I see you are in quite a few...I'm still working on them... ;)

Russell Sivey

Date: 3/13/2012 7:27:00 PM

What a wonderful little write my friend! I really enjoyed the rhyming scheme for this poem! I can totally relate with this person wanting to sleep on the couch instead of the bed due to his loneliness feelings that he has! I was there at one early part of my life! I hope that this is not your situation now! I love your write that I have read this evening Don! Great Work!

Deborah Burch
Date: 3/13/2012 10:10:00 PM

Ahh, Russell, thank you so much for your kind encouragement...it means so much to me and truely heart felt...huggsss~Deb~