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Entwined

I was strolling I was sitting in the park alone on on a lazy a cold bench afternoon, throwing feeling the crumbs to sun on my the pigeons face and the thinking of sadness in how lonely my heart they seemed when I saw you. Our eyes met and it seemed like the world stopped, just for a moment. I blushed Your eyes and turned sparkled green my eyes iridescence, from you, as you turned embarrassed your head, by my thoughts. your cheeks You were so flushed warmly, handsome "Was that huddled in for me?" your long I just kept overcoat walking too with the wind afraid to talk to tickling your hair. such a beautiful girl. Then like lightning it hit me. I turned to you and said, "Hi." How funny it was, like it was meant to be, as we spoke the same word together. I sat beside Your smile you and we warmed me talked for as you awhile as if laughed at we were my silliness old friends, and I felt but more. feelings I listened to that I had your sweet never known voice as you before. It was gently touched like my world my arm, was new, and I felt the joy of you, and knew at that moment you and I were meant to be. I would give my life to you and our minds, our hearts and our souls would be forever entwined.
02/08/16

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 4/2/2020 8:26:00 PM
Well written and expertly typed. I couldn't begin to do it. Great job!
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James Inman
Date: 4/2/2020 11:20:00 PM
Thank you for your nice comment Timothy. It seems Line has brought new life to this poem.
Date: 4/2/2020 5:15:00 PM
Wow! The planning, the flow , the theme or all truly wonderful, James. I too was guided by Line, but she knows her shape. A fav.
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James Inman
Date: 4/2/2020 8:02:00 PM
Hi Eve, thanks for visiting and the lovely comment. It's always a pleasure hearing from you.
Date: 4/2/2020 3:24:00 PM
This is FANTABULOUS, my friend,. how very very clever!! Line drew my attention to it and I looked way down and saw I HAD seen it already and I had faved it "way back when" Line has good taste!!
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James Inman
Date: 4/2/2020 7:57:00 PM
Thanks for the return visit Andrea and both of your great comments.
Date: 4/2/2020 2:58:00 PM
This is absolutely brilliant, James. A FAVE for me.
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James Inman
Date: 4/2/2020 7:56:00 PM
How sweet of you to share this with others Line. Thank you, and thank you for the wonderful comment.
Date: 2/27/2016 1:15:00 AM
James, thank you for the reply
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Date: 2/24/2016 12:14:00 PM
Such an amazing Shape Poem with lovely imagery of 'entwined love.' James! Congratulations on your First Place win. Sandra
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James Inman
Date: 2/24/2016 12:29:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sandra.
Date: 2/23/2016 11:42:00 AM
James, Congratulations on your Entwined win... XOX ~LINDA~
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James Inman
Date: 2/23/2016 12:38:00 PM
Hi PD, thank you.
Date: 2/23/2016 8:48:00 AM
Wow! Congratulations on your win with this very creative and clever verse! Amazing. A 7
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James Inman
Date: 2/23/2016 8:52:00 AM
Thank you Susan, Wows are wonderful things.
Date: 2/23/2016 12:16:00 AM
i am stunned; so lovely on substance and shape, james... sending my super congrats!..huggs
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James Inman
Date: 2/23/2016 8:54:00 AM
Thank you Nette, this is such a nice (and welcome) comment.
Date: 2/22/2016 11:06:00 PM
Hey James, Wow, what an inventive use of language. Congrats on your 1st place finish. This was a treat to read. It took me a few seconds to figure out how to read it--so cool how each coil ends up sharing the same line when they meet. Cheers,
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James Inman
Date: 2/23/2016 9:02:00 AM
Thanks Brian. This is a great comment. I was a little concerned about it being difficult to read but chose not to influence the reader with a comment. As I was writing it I thought of it as being the beginning of two sets of DNA intermingling to create a new life.
Date: 2/22/2016 10:01:00 PM
Congrats on great win with this superb verse James..
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James Inman
Date: 3/10/2016 9:37:00 AM
Forgive me for the late response to your lovely comment Dr. Sharma. Thank you.
Date: 2/22/2016 6:49:00 PM
James, very creative! congrats on your placement! *smiles*-luloo
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James Inman
Date: 3/10/2016 9:36:00 AM
Laura, I just noticed I missed your nice comment on my poem, please forgive me for the late response. Thank you.
Date: 2/10/2016 10:35:00 AM
James, WHAT A GREAT POEM! It's skillfully, thoughtfully, and lovingly written. I just love it! Janice
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James Inman
Date: 2/11/2016 8:16:00 AM
Thank you Janice, it was a fun write.
Date: 2/9/2016 6:57:00 PM
Absolutely....incredibly amazing! :) I LOVED this! Wow...how artistic and sweet.
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James Inman
Date: 2/9/2016 8:45:00 PM
Thank you so much Eileen for this beautiful comment.
Date: 2/9/2016 3:43:00 PM
OH MY GOSH, you are incredible, Ralph. this is amazing creativity. FAVE
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James Inman
Date: 2/9/2016 8:46:00 PM
Andrea, what a wonderful comment, thank you.
Date: 2/8/2016 11:02:00 PM
nice , but complex shape
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James Inman
Date: 2/9/2016 6:34:00 AM
Thanks Mark
Date: 2/8/2016 11:31:00 AM
this is terrific James..wonderfully written!
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James Inman
Date: 2/8/2016 11:50:00 AM
Thank you David.
Date: 2/8/2016 10:08:00 AM
Enjoyed this poem in shaped dialogue immensely, James. I only tried the shape form once and I know it's not easy. This is more complicated though, but the read flows easily. Beautiful and romantic. Kim
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James Inman
Date: 2/8/2016 11:47:00 AM
Thank you, Kim. I enjoy doing writes like this.

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