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Entangled

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Entangled

When did I become entangled in you?
Your vines wrapped around my heart.
Squeezing The life from me.
Tighter and tighter with each breath.

Your vines wrapped around my heart.
To be this close was a silent dream.
Tighter and tighter with each breath.
Encased by you I start to scream.

To be this close was a silent dream.
Now I live within a silent nightmare.
Encased by you I start to scream.
Soon I will be unrecognizable.

Now I live within a silent nightmare.
Squeezing the life from me.
soon I will be unrecognizable.
When did I become entangled in you?

Entangled Vines contest
July 19, 2013

No worries I am not in a challenged relationship, drawing from past experience.

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  1. Date: 8/19/2013 4:54:00 PM
    Though I wish the whole piece had rhymed, it truly touched me emotionally, as I am sure it has everyone else. I love it when a poet expresses a universal sentiment; I think all of us know exactly what you mean and have felt a similar way many times over. I have struggled with addiction for many years, and this also reminded me of my "entanglement" with addiction. Thank you for sharing an awesome piece :)

  1. Date: 7/23/2013 10:01:00 AM
    The genius of imagery and metaphor has spoken! Well done!!...Milt

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/23/2013 2:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Milt I appreciate you taking a look at my poems. Take care.
  1. Date: 7/21/2013 1:03:00 AM
    hey, this makes a great metaphor. I had considered going this route, using it for romance or love. Vines gone amuck. Love it.

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/21/2013 6:44:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Andrea;0)
  1. Date: 7/19/2013 9:14:00 PM
    Nicely done as usual. I am home but that is all I can say. Love Colleen

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/21/2013 6:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Collen
  1. Date: 7/19/2013 5:00:00 PM
    Glad that this is past and only good is now and the future..Reads like winning material for the contest..Sara

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/19/2013 6:02:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Sara, I was blessed to find the love of my life. Twenty years and counting.
  1. Date: 7/19/2013 3:49:00 PM
    Its all about changes from something beautiful to something so scary you d rather live without...I guess those past experiences make us a wiser person in tomorrow s choices. Excellent Richard

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/19/2013 4:05:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Some make the same mistake over and over again. Thanks for commenting.
  1. Date: 7/19/2013 1:44:00 PM
    Oooh, nice. I like how you describe the dream evolving into a nightmare. A damn good write, Richard. Good luck in the contest with this strong entry, my friend. Licia :-)

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/19/2013 4:06:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks can always use a bit of luck
  1. Date: 7/19/2013 1:22:00 PM
    THIS ABSOLUTELY.....WITHOUT THE SHADOW OF A DOUBT ROCKS! Ok....will calm down now. Seriously...like...how? How, Richard. This contest....I couldn't even muster a thought! This is amazing! Good job, good luck, good night! ;) I had to put that last bit in. It's almost 10:30 pm, but I'm NOT sleepy. It just sounded good! ;)

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/19/2013 4:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    What a great comment, you just made my day.:0)
  1. Date: 7/19/2013 12:49:00 PM
    you had this all knitted together in a most wired way... i am impressed with the poetic appeal of your art-words... :) huggs

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/19/2013 4:09:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks so much Nette
  1. Date: 7/19/2013 11:48:00 AM
    Oh, Rick... I can relate to this poem. You have captured the hopelessness (and near-suffocation) perfectly. I'm glad to hear you broke free! And you can add "pantoum" to the list of forms you have mastered!! :)

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/19/2013 11:54:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Heather
  1. Date: 7/19/2013 11:33:00 AM
    Amazing, sad, yet poignant. Falsified love can do that to a person. Fantastic job!

    Lamoureux Avatar Richard Lamoureux
    Date: 7/19/2013 11:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks Drake, you are on a roll today really enjoyed your wedding poem.