Energy

ENERGY old tree standing bare fitful workings underneath grizzly bear asleep what the earthworm hears a mighty boiling nether blue sky sunshine level plane sky forest asleep mighty roiling beneath

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/2/2011 4:13:00 PM

Interesting work..A grizzly bear snoring probably would be a very rolling rumbling sound indeed...Enjoyed reading this eve..Thanks for stopping by..On most of my poems now I add something if you just click on "About This Poem"...The hummer is a hummingbird..Apparently the Albino Hummingbird isn't so rare..Someone sent me an email with a picture of one then I typed it into my search engine and there were many pictures of them..I personally have not seen one only pictures..Sara

Jack Horne

Date: 12/2/2011 3:01:00 PM

Lovely writes, my friend. I especially like the first one

Date: 11/28/2011 3:15:00 PM

Wonderful use of imagery with interesting analogies. Keep up the good writing my friend. Thank you for stopping by with your kind words. Karen

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 11/21/2011 9:26:00 PM

You are on a roll with the kus Daver and doing a great job with all. I love especially the first on in this trio. The "fitful workings" is really special.

Gwendolen Song

Date: 11/21/2011 5:36:00 AM

You just posted 4 haikus in a row...are u turning into a Japanese poet? ha ha. With Deb and Charle's contests and teaching on this site lately, I have grown more fond of this form. Enjoyed this set, Daver. More of yours to read. :) Gwendolen

Daver Austin
Date: 11/22/2011 10:47:00 AM

Hi, Gwen. I'm not long winded, poetry-wise, never have been, and so Haiku is a good medium for me. I

James Fraser

Date: 11/20/2011 1:11:00 PM

Fine Haiku series Daver. It's good to hear your from Scottish stock. Us Scot's are the best, without a doubt. Have a lovely Sunday :)

Nathan D.

Date: 11/20/2011 10:36:00 AM

daver .... daver..... that is an interesting an unique name i like it. really interesting haiku i like it very mucho

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/19/2011 1:14:00 PM

Excellent use of the "twist" in each verse, Daver. What creative images of nature! (I especially love the second verse.) Well done, my friend. Love, carolyn

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/18/2011 11:18:00 PM

sorry, but that seems to be the only way I can get the info to you!! Marie (at Shadowpoetry) thinks you have accidentally blocked me at your end . Do you have any computer friends who can unblock me by seeing your email account?

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/18/2011 11:16:00 PM

HI, Daver. Guess you can't get anything from me at hotmail. Here is the info you asked for: for one chapbook, $12.00 (10 + 2 shipping). Make checks out to Shadow Poetry. Shadow Poetry 1209 Milwaukee Street Excelsior Springs, MO 64024

M. Hussain Effendi

Date: 11/18/2011 9:05:00 PM

The energy is overwhelming, I can't take it anymore... Good one, sir

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 11/18/2011 8:32:00 PM

enjoyed your energy!! I had to cups of joe tonight and I am wired for now.

James Peranteau

Date: 11/18/2011 7:44:00 PM

Def. loaded with energy dear poet ! Very creative Dave ! Have a wonderful weekend sir....much love, james

Date: 11/18/2011 1:41:00 PM

Creative use of imagery for interesting reading. Keep on writing my friend. Happy Thanksgving! Karen

M.I.A .

Date: 11/18/2011 12:53:00 AM

you have a quality that in my language means roughly something like this; silently floating...sorry, it means so much more but i can't find the right terms. I truly enjoyed it though. captivating

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/17/2011 9:45:00 PM

Yes, there is so much energy "roiling" beneath,Daver! You always are coming up with unique topics for your poems! Hey, did you get my hotmail reply? Let me know. I am dying to know if you are able to get my replies if not done thru PFT. Luv, Andrea

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 11/17/2011 8:05:00 PM

You are really good doing haiku Daver, I think if I had to choose, the first one is my favorite. that second line must be those peaceful snores. Keep up the great work.