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Elaine's Camelot

In twilight’s chill, there wafts the sad lament of one whose Camelot will be her doom. She drifts - like fall to winter - to her death. She whispers, as her candle light is spent, “Oh, Lancelot, this boat will be my tomb!” and longs for his warm kiss with her last breath. Written 11/02/13 by Andrea Dietrich for Nette Onclaud's SENSES FOR A SESTET Contest * The lovely painting this poem is based on for this challenge was itself based on the Victorian ballad "The Lady of Shalott", written by Alfred Lord Tennyson. Furthermore, Tennyson's ballad was loosely based on a 13th century Authurian legend about a woman named Elaine de Astolat; thus, my title for this Italian sestet.
also for PD's Latest Poem contest

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Date: 12/8/2013 11:11:00 AM
And how smooth a write here Andrea.' i suppose you would have got a win with this one well portrayed..)
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Date: 11/22/2013 10:49:00 AM
I can definitely see why this poem won: you write very cleverly and clearly, and most skillfully. Great piece; kudos, Andrea :)
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Date: 11/17/2013 2:57:00 AM
Andrea, Congratulations & thank you for supporting my contest... always ~LINDA~
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Date: 11/16/2013 8:26:00 AM
Girl, If you keep writing all the good poems. There will be none left for the rest of us. Just kidding. I love all of your poems. Keep it up. P.S. Check out Christopher Thor Britt's poems. You both write in a similar styles.
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Date: 11/12/2013 1:13:00 PM
Excellent picture adorned with nice colors. Enjoyed the scene. Congrats on your win. Loved always, my friend, bl
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Date: 11/11/2013 6:46:00 PM
Just loved it Andie! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 11/10/2013 11:01:00 PM
Wow, a story within a story..great job. congrats. BG
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Date: 11/10/2013 6:09:00 PM
Hi Andrea, stopping by again just to congratulate you on your big win :) hugs
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Date: 11/10/2013 9:08:00 AM
congrats on a great win Andrea
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Date: 11/10/2013 7:46:00 AM
Awesome win..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 11/9/2013 11:53:00 PM
This illustrates torment and love in expressive language. Congratulations and thank you for your good wishes.
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Date: 11/9/2013 8:31:00 PM
I have read this one Petal, but I nipped off to reread 'The Lady of Shalott' and forgot to come back, I'm easily lead lol. Congratulations on a fine poem and win. Take care, Richard
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Date: 11/9/2013 6:25:00 PM
Wonderful write...Lovely piece,Andrea...Congrats on your superb win in this contest..
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Date: 11/9/2013 9:29:00 AM
This poem is awesome! You found the passion that will not release, even in death.
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Date: 11/6/2013 7:50:00 PM
When a painting comes to life and speaks. This is what you've done.
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Date: 11/6/2013 5:53:00 PM
beautiful write Andrea...best wishes
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Date: 11/6/2013 9:04:00 AM
Floating down the Styx, eh. Very sad, especially for Arthur. Ah, the price true love must pay. I never tire of your wonderful talent. Love, daver
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Date: 11/5/2013 6:20:00 PM
A passionate write on a subject I'm even working on well done bravo i can feel history within the lines. also thank you for your comment on my hindenburg, i'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Date: 11/5/2013 1:45:00 PM
Oh wow.........your entry to Nette's Contest has winner written all over it!! Excellent !!! And so sad ! Ps......thank you so much, Andrea.......what a lovely surprise to be at the top of the salt-shaker !!! I'm honored, thanks very much!
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Date: 11/5/2013 10:47:00 AM
What a masterful poem you have written. And you write your poems in a multitude of forms with ease. Love your comment at the end. That you knew all that history from the picture provided Nette Onclaud just amazes me. Bravo!
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Date: 11/5/2013 8:48:00 AM
You came up with a very beautiful heartfelt write from a great inspiration my dear friend Andrea! I love it so much and so enjoyed. A winner for me! Thank you so much for sharing! Have a wonderful day always! love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora
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Date: 11/5/2013 7:42:00 AM
Wow! A lovely one dearest friend,kip d fire blazing. Baron of Ebullion is a title I got from my beloveth Sir Godfrey of Ebullion a crusader n brother to Baldwin 1 king of Jerusalem. I plan to officialise d title in future,ebullion is in France. Warm love, Bob- based on belief
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Date: 11/5/2013 7:40:00 AM
wonderful poem Andrea.By the way am I dreaming? how could this happen? A place in the books of Andrea.Thanks for the place in the winners list. Truly speaking i deserve this.Thank you. : ) Jenish.
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Date: 11/5/2013 5:01:00 AM
Reads like winning material to me..You went the extra mile in writing one..Thanks for the visits to my page..I have answered your soup mail..Sara
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Date: 11/4/2013 7:24:00 AM
creative and captures the imagination fine pen Andrea Ty for your review on Men I have been ill so am far behind on answering remarks. Shadow x smile
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