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Edits of My Life

EDITS OF MY LIFE The years scrolled down like pages Lots of memories to highlight Bad times not deleted That wouldn’t feel right. Sometimes the years just flowed Almost perfect from the start Others were a struggle Etched forever in my heart There were missing commas Brief respites from the pain Transitions were never easy But life went on again. We’d seen unexpected full stops Sudden death and falling tears Some insertions gave great pleasure As I scrolled back through the years Others dared to comment Sometimes along the way Suggested I make changes That price too high to pay Edits never ended— Descriptions just not right The deadline approached quickly Time to print in black and white I wouldn’t really change things —even if I could I liked the script I’ d chosen, things that I had done The life story that unfolded Was for me a special one

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 7/27/2014 10:13:00 AM
welcome to PS Jackie, nice piece this on your life, really well penned indeed, well done, have blessed day, Gordon
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Jackie Faasisila
Date: 7/27/2014 10:26:00 PM
Thanks Gordon. I am enjoying PS and trying to get used to it. Your comment is appreciated. Jackie
Date: 7/27/2014 2:56:00 AM
nice discriptive work and congrats on the feature. haven't commented layely (health and all)but I did so enjoy this poem. thanks for sharing
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Date: 7/24/2014 9:42:00 AM
Congratulations on being on the featured poems list, Jackie! Wonderful write! Keep churning them out!
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Date: 7/22/2014 1:49:00 AM
Hi, thanks for your welcome. I am just trying to figure out how this works but looks like great poems and people. Jackie
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Date: 7/22/2014 1:47:00 AM
hi Anne, Thanks for the welcome. Looks like lots of interesting poets and poems. I look forward to reading and posting more. Alofa atu, Jackie
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Date: 7/21/2014 10:50:00 AM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Jackie :) - I choose your first great written poem - Nice to meet you :) - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- PoetrySoup Rule1: Be kind and keep PoetrySoup a haven. PoetrySoup is a drama free zone(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Jackie Faasisila
Date: 7/24/2014 2:51:00 AM
hi Anne, Thanks for the welcome. Looks like lots of interesting poets and poems. I look forward to reading and posting more. Alofa atu, Jackie
Date: 7/18/2014 10:24:00 AM
Welcome to Poetry Soup, Jackie. Very nice poem. I am glad you discovered this nice community of writers and hope you enjoy the site. Read the work of other poet's and comment if you find something you like; many poets will return the favor. Over time you will get to "know" some of us. You are welcome to visit my page anytime. Enjoy!
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Date: 7/18/2014 6:43:00 AM
Dear Jackie, am really enjoying your poems especially this, life is never easy but as long as you're doing the editing, then it can be tolerable. Loved the summary in the last stanza. Alofas, Tiaua.
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Date: 7/16/2014 4:47:00 PM
Jackie,, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the community, as I did when I first join, March 2010. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I'm looking forward to following you and your poetry ha-ha a special pair:) here's the link to the contest page. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/ <---~Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
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