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Inspired by AD Hope.


 

 

She flings her body skyward as every winter before, her heart afire, she follows a pre set- migratory course, divinely guided, from half a world away. Coming or going her destination always becomes home, to nest again -raise another brood knowing that generations drive her grand obsession- the self- exile she endures heavy on her breast She sees around her unfamiliar landscape longs for lush valleys and trees of evergreen With each day her inner call grows stronger, fills her with an urgent sense to flight to take to the endless skies- one tiny bird, uncertain, of her flock, alone in the vast and blue unfriendly sky Her wings falter, she feels that death is near, a last flight comes for every bird. It seems, what divine force held her course before - is gone she tries but her flight turns aimless Below, the landscape is a map- less blur that baffles her tiny brain From the dark valleys below a black fog rises Hostile winds impede her faltering flight until the ground without warning or ill-will calls the tiny form again to earth. Premiere Contest number 9 Contest Judged: 9/8/2016 12:01:00 PM Sponsored by: SKAT A 9th Place

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Date: 6/25/2022 7:07:00 PM
An end many see, yet not the one we ever wish for them. A beautifully sad write SuZ
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Date: 6/25/2022 9:00:00 AM
Very tenderly written poem about this poor bird. I like all your animal and flower poems.
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Date: 8/29/2018 6:01:00 PM
Love it! good job Suzanne
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 8/31/2018 10:39:00 AM
Hi Timothy: Thanks so much for reading and commenting. Most appreciated. SuZ
Date: 9/9/2016 9:12:00 AM
Suzanne, congrats on your placement! :)-luloo
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Date: 9/8/2016 7:07:00 PM
This was nicely written and held my interest all the way through. I really like the closing lines, there is something comforting about Earth calling home her children, despite being a generally sad affair. I enjoyed your perspective in this write. Congrats on your win. -G
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Date: 9/8/2016 12:35:00 PM
Suz, Congratulations on your win in SKAT'S "Premiere Contest number 9" It was my pleasure judging this one for my sister. Stop by and enjoy your win on Skat's Blog "BLACKBIRDS." with lots of love LINDA (For: SKAT)
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Date: 8/16/2014 3:46:00 PM
Wow Suz, I love your take on this most genius poem that I read first before reading yours. Both were very moving and spoke to that spirit of love I have for nature and its inhabitants. Truly a beautiful poem you have written. I can easily see why you were inspired to write it.
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Date: 8/14/2014 5:52:00 AM
ah u mean the death of a migratory bird while migrating right, eh awesome and sweetly sad, all death is sad since every new life seems daunting. I admire how u termed it self-exile. Awesome as a freeverse, yor whole poem. Nice to read u again once more.
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Date: 8/10/2014 4:54:00 PM
Suzanne - I have not read the original poem but I will as soon as I finish here AND my guess is that this equals or maybe surpasses it! Great inspiration can inspire and breed even GREATER inspiration. I've always been fascinated with this subject; not only concerning birds, but Monarch butterflies, Salmon, etc....How?? Scientists have their theories but in all boils down to your line: "divinely guided half a world away"...Thank you for this my friend - Tim
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Tim Ryerson
Date: 8/10/2014 5:06:00 PM
PS: "The small worry of her death" is indeed small, but in my opinion, it is no less small than the death of ANY human being no matter who that might be...These creatures were created by God just as we were and have the same right to share this planet with us, maybe even more. At least they got it right and most of us DON'T. I will stop rambling now...
Date: 8/9/2014 9:37:00 PM
oh my, this is great writing. I especially love the last part, how you paint so beautifully this sad death of the brave little bird. It reminds me also of a small poem I read one time about the unfeeling nature of "nature"
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Date: 7/1/2014 3:39:00 PM
I see that by missing all of your poems for the past few years, I have missed some very satisfying reading! Today I corrected that a bit, and intend to look at more before you disappear from my consciousness! I do intend to be back for more. :-) -Dean
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Date: 6/12/2014 7:36:00 AM
Beautiful, intriguing, and sad. I have felt like that tiny bird sometimes, facing the unfamiliar, being uncertain.
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Date: 6/8/2014 1:59:00 PM
Very nicely done...beautiful yet sad...
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Date: 6/7/2014 12:44:00 PM
Beautifully done, applause...love Jayne x
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 6/7/2014 1:08:00 PM
Thanks Jane This was a fun exercise to try.

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