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Depression

DEPRESSION Clang! Night Cold An old time trolley Dimly lit inside Rocking along On a long straight silver track One passenger Cars Shops Sidewalks Shining wet oily street Reflected On a frosted window Ghostly forms Other dimensional Half alive Sickly yellow smooth (bamboo?) seats Clang! This constant rocking At night speed Urging This old time trolley On a long straight silver track This yellow boat Sailing Going nowhere

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 4/16/2011 9:34:00 PM
I DiGG this piece. Respect. ~JSLambert
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Date: 4/11/2011 8:19:00 PM
yes writing does wonders for the soul. this is a great write, thank you for readindg The Pond and for your comment
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Date: 3/26/2011 9:04:00 AM
I think writing can do wonders for times when we feel depressed-- I sure do hope that you'd feel better soon, I can hope for you, right? I sure do pray that the boat will sail somewhere soon...
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Date: 3/25/2011 2:25:00 PM
One "clang" one "passanger" one "old time trolly"........."Move it on over...the mean ol' dog is mov'n in" ! Great write dear poet ! Have a great weekend Sir ! Much love, james
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Date: 3/24/2011 8:20:00 PM
Very expressive Dave and luv the punctuation.. I am a punctuation girl..so appreciate the emphasis luv.. do they still have trolley's luv? we only have buses and trains here besides crs .. enjoyed with luv my friend..
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Date: 3/24/2011 2:23:00 PM
HI, there,DAver, are you still feeling depressed. Or is spring starting to show herself a little?? (YOu are so much like me, feeling kind of blue with winter still hanging around)
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Date: 3/24/2011 9:25:00 AM
Hey Daver! Love this one...the pauses between words permits the reader enjoy each morsel! Great imagery, and motion. That "Clang" certainly wakes up the reader.:) I might appolo-gize for making you puzzled. I think Paean was being naughty. Wishing you and yours, the best!! Mikki
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Date: 3/24/2011 9:23:00 AM
Hi Dave, I am also depressed and can feel your intension! Well written, my friend! And thank you for your comment on "Like Young Love"! have a great day! Love, Gert
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Date: 3/24/2011 12:10:00 AM
oh,my you truly did create a depressive mood with this one. Let's combine it with my black crane ballet to make a tragedy! For some reason I also thought of sTreetcar named desire, that ended sadly too! Thanks for keeping up on your poetry and giving me new ones to read!
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Date: 3/23/2011 10:24:00 AM
Your trolley has no destination and the poem reminds me of the old "slow boat to nowhere" saying, Daver. This one-passenger ride surely describes the feelings one has when they are depressed. Also, your imagery here made me think of the "Twilight Zone." All aboard! Love from your spooky friend, Carolyn
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