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Deciduous

Dancing breezes Bursts of sun Crisp apple autumn day Leaves twirl upwards with a flourish Spurning twigs that yearn to cling Lovers pass by, their laughter lingers Dark clouds obscure the sun Colors change to shadows blurred Gone is the beauty in the rust and gold Longing is found in the chill as the sky surrenders One drop of rain falls and a lonely blackbird takes wing Windblown and cold I breathe in your sweater's scent Never more Will you reach out to intercept A falling leaf ____________________________________________________________________________ Collaboration between Sharon Weimer and Carrie Richards for Debbie Guzzi's "Twining" contest

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Date: 3/21/2010 3:32:00 AM
You have made the season comes alive with your beautiful depiction here. Congratulations to you Carrie and Sharon. (^_^) Noel.
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Date: 3/18/2010 7:29:00 PM
Congratulations on your third place win Carrie. Agape, Moses
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Date: 3/18/2010 4:54:00 PM
congrats on the win, enjoyed!!
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Date: 3/18/2010 3:16:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on your winning poem collaboration and placement in The Twining contest.. enjoy your speciial prize today..luv.. Linda-Marie...
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Date: 3/15/2010 6:05:00 PM
Such a pleasure to read this lovely verse. Strong visuals of things coming to an end. well done Carrie/Sharon...Thank you for the comments on my fields of oats, as a child I did see a reaper with a scythe. Oats were all around us.....cheers Margaret
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Date: 3/14/2010 9:06:00 AM
A beautiful poem by two lovely ladies, i would certainly vote for this GEM any day >> good luck in the contest, but i doubt you'll need it >> James
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Date: 3/14/2010 1:54:00 AM
Very beautiful my friends. Good luck in the contest. Smiles, Dane Ann
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Date: 3/13/2010 6:40:00 PM
Great job, Miss Carrie. You and Sharon will be in the winners circle. I'm jealous as I was musing over entering this contest and you were one of the ones I had in mind. Oh, Well... typical. Better luck next time. Good luck! Regards, Gerard.
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Date: 3/13/2010 5:45:00 PM
This is so beautiful. I had no idea what the twining thing was about, but I think I am reading the first place winners right here!! wow, Sharon is on board? How awesome is that? And CArrie. If it's ok for me to take my time, I will try that tag, I just can' t promise anything right away. Luv,Andrea
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Date: 3/13/2010 5:31:00 PM
Great theme and excellence in bringing it together ..Should be in the winner's circle ..Best wishes for success...Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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Date: 3/13/2010 8:17:00 AM
You and Sharon have created a masterpiece in this very challenging form of poetry. Number one for sure! Don't need to wish you both luck; the poem will ensure success on its own merits. Excellent! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 3/13/2010 2:17:00 AM
Great write loaded with amazing descriptions, I miss Sharon's work. Hope everything is great with you two...all the best.
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Date: 3/12/2010 11:36:00 PM
Two of te best poets and friends collaborating in this gem... this is a winnnnneeeeeeerrr Carrie..and Im glad to see Sharon here..going to my favz..Charma
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Date: 3/12/2010 10:33:00 PM
Good luck to you in the contest.Thanks for your comments, Carrie. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/12/2010 10:09:00 PM
Good luck ladies in the contest.. a beautiful entry ..a sure trip to the winners circle.. luv.. Linda-Marie.
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Date: 3/12/2010 7:52:00 PM
Very nice poem...enjoyed...good luck in the contest...Marty
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