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Death

Death Soft feet You came by In hard blow to Wipe so many lives Not a second did they Have to make but a last wish Which for sure would be “GOD SAVE ME." Though god would not have listened or come To stop time or reverse your action, rash! Resubmitted 10/10/16 Written on 23/07/16 55 syllables (HowManySyllables.com)

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/27/2016 1:05:00 AM

A profound write Sunita. You write well! 7 ; )

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 7/27/2016 2:04:00 AM

Thanks, you like it and for the high rating! Unfor. got N/A :D Sunita.

David Smith

Date: 7/24/2016 6:20:00 AM

It it what it is. Yet your words somehow put beauty there and a warning to us all. Death does not always knock before entering. I think your writing is more about life than death. Excellent use of available syllables. Good luck for contest David.

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 7/24/2016 7:38:00 AM

Thanks for going through the poem and for your valuable comment. :) Sunita

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/23/2016 10:29:00 AM

the topic is very good for etheree form. a little suggestion , use have instead of had on line seven. Then it will be perfect!

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 7/23/2016 12:03:00 PM

Thanks for going through it my dear, and thanks for the suggestion. GL to you. Love Sunita

Karam Misra

Date: 7/23/2016 7:51:00 AM

Nicely expressed, Sunita! Death surely comes with no warning these days. All the best for the contest. ~karam~

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 7/23/2016 10:26:00 AM

Hmm..Glad you like it, its my first trial of Etheree. Thanks. Sunita :)