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Dancing In the Starry Night

Moonbeams fall upon us Our face so jovial and bright, Others beholding with hush We’re Dancing in the starry night. Gazing us thousands we don’t care Sapphire embedded gown so bright, So gorgeous you in unkempt hair We’re Dancing in the starry night. Moon smiles, stars rising few Meadow lit by fireflies’ light, Moon’s tears fall and turns to dew We’re Dancing in the starry night. For those who have died You missed our dancing sight, And for those who have survived Come and dance in the starry night.

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Suzanne Delaney

Date: 11/30/2013 12:05:00 AM

Hi Kiran: .....sapphire embedded gowns and moon smiles...I love the surprising language you have used in this Congratulations. SuZ

Kiran Bantawa
Date: 12/2/2013 6:08:00 PM

thank you for liking !!

Charmane Bellen

Date: 11/27/2013 12:55:00 AM

Congrats!!wanna dance too..:)

Kiran Bantawa
Date: 11/27/2013 1:32:00 AM

let's go and dance . thanks!

Kelly Deschler

Date: 11/26/2013 7:05:00 PM

I love the beautiful imagery in this poem! Nice flow and great rhyming! Really good work, Kiran! Congratulations on your well deserved win!...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poem. I appreciate it very much!

Kiran Bantawa
Date: 11/27/2013 1:33:00 AM

you are welcome and thank you.

Dan Kearley

Date: 11/26/2013 12:51:00 PM

Alright! This makes me want to dance. Nice write! Thank you for stopping by.

Kiran Bantawa
Date: 11/27/2013 1:33:00 AM

for you. thanks!

Joseph May

Date: 11/26/2013 9:49:00 AM

lovely write Kiran...congrats on your win

Kiran Bantawa
Date: 11/27/2013 1:33:00 AM

ok thanks for liking my poem.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/25/2013 11:10:00 PM

Kiran, Congratulations :-) for your nice win.... Thank you for considering my contest. Good Night ~ Linda ~

Kiran Bantawa
Date: 11/26/2013 6:45:00 AM

thank you very much.

Kelly Deschler

Date: 11/12/2013 6:34:00 PM

This poem is beautifully written, Kiran! The imagery is so relaxing and dreamy. I really enjoyed it! Wonderful work!...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poem. I appreciate it very much!

Kiran Bantawa
Date: 11/16/2013 7:41:00 AM

thanks for liking.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/9/2013 1:02:00 AM

this is so beautiful. With those repeating lines, are you sure this is not maybe a kyrielle form of poetry?

Kiran Bantawa
Date: 11/12/2013 7:08:00 AM

thanks,

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/8/2013 10:54:00 AM

Ahh!! I really like this one.. It has great rhythm, flow, and rhyme with the repeat line a ear catcher..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Kiran Bantawa
Date: 11/8/2013 4:54:00 PM

thank u very much for liking