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Cruelest Winds

Autumn leaves released against the cruelest winds unmoored, without a distant shore to land have no instruction, nor direction, swept by the tides of winter seas Surfing waves without an oar curled tight against themselves Fall winds spread them far, until they sink and crumble into dust While I must not stumble and must not curl tight against myself but be kin to nature... soar the waves of winter seas adrift in a sea of knowledge following directions of my heart unmoored, but with a distant shore to land against the future of autumn's cruelest wind __________________________________________ 9/12/14 For Shadow's Contest: Double Etheree

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Date: 9/17/2014 2:20:00 PM
Wow! This double must have taken some thought. A double read for sure. great stuff. Love, daver
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Date: 9/13/2014 12:20:00 PM
Ah, the winds sure can be the cruelest indeed! And amazing how you pulled this off in a double etheree, Carrie! Wow! For me, you tied it so well, these 2 etherees, even turning it around and showing strength in character amidst those cruel winds... funny, my captcha says "arb"-- makes me think of "arboreal", which I also somehow relate to wind--wind blown trees during a storm. OK that was some weird connecting done by me, don't mind me.
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Date: 9/12/2014 10:21:00 PM
wow, this has metaphor, imagery, deep meaning AND great adherence to form. I LOVE this. best I have seen! (wait till you see the lame one I cooked up)
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Date: 9/12/2014 6:55:00 PM
This is beautiful Carrie...I love the transition between the two...hugs Tim
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Date: 9/12/2014 6:00:00 PM
I love the message to choose the right path in life,and the determination and coutage to overcome the cruelest winds.Clever indeed dear Carrie.So much wisdom in your words my dear.
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Date: 9/12/2014 5:50:00 PM
I see wisdom in your poem, and the knowledge to connect the thread that runs through all life..thank you it was a good read
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Date: 9/12/2014 5:06:00 PM
Oh I love the balance between the two etheree's best of luck girl, awesome writing
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