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Criminals- Part3- Fiction

I hate a fool.. one who never sees the angles of the most important things I heard sheep are produced from such acts of betrayal, with that said the entire town spoke to their loving criminals daily and never knew we were the ones performing magic with their ancient valuables. But this part is not about that its about what drove me to find the right ones to commit such a sin and why a place I love so dearly with their secrets and hatred for something different and free now you have to deal with us society and don't worry no one will die or be hurt no one will slowly become a slave non like you I have compassion... We believe in God not ourselves. To be continued..

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 8/19/2010 9:04:00 PM
LContinuing. Joyce
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Date: 7/21/2010 6:29:00 AM
luv it
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Date: 7/17/2010 10:50:00 AM
Interesting write..Sara
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Date: 7/16/2010 9:14:00 PM
The saga continues. You makes me laugh, even though there is nothing funny about you write.
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Date: 7/16/2010 2:05:00 PM
Great write! Love the imagery and story. -Mike
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Date: 7/16/2010 10:59:00 AM
great write u really act like u were from them :P
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Date: 7/16/2010 10:33:00 AM
Well, you have your own society here and people liking it, i like it a lot, let me know for when you bring the next one up, im sure be here to comment, see mine's and comment too, perhape's maybe you'll get a very good hang there...
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Date: 7/16/2010 5:27:00 AM
"ooo, the ending was deep, and wowzers lol this is getting pretty intense.. getting good and look forward to the next one, =(^.^)=Royal"
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Date: 7/15/2010 7:16:00 AM
with a fully loaded drum in the tommy gun,shottin holes in the moon as you aim for the sun
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Date: 7/14/2010 6:08:00 PM
That was AWESOME dude!!!! Keep on writing and have with it!
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Date: 7/14/2010 1:37:00 AM
Hi Diiamond :)-- very interesting thoughts you put in here-- and you sure got a lot of us wondering what happens next---20 more to go? Wow... wish you all the best! -- nikko ;)
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Date: 7/14/2010 1:19:00 AM
I reread your first,second and now reading the third part of your poem,great,great work. .waiting for the next. .C
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Date: 7/13/2010 11:47:00 PM
You seem to have a flair for the dramatic, yet the backstory that you have chosen is not one of poetry's better written genre. Interesting choice of form and subject. Like many, I wonder if this is truly fiction or some experience that has invaded your life. Great write and I am looking for more. Dan C
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Date: 7/13/2010 9:19:00 PM
Not sure where this is going, Diamond. I read all three parts. how many segments will there be. You are sure getting a lot of readers. That is ?wesome! Keep up your great creativity and imagination. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 7/13/2010 7:14:00 PM
Great work! enjoyed your writing very much. Thanks for your kind comments on my poem Vampire Visit. Have a wonderful day! Scarlett
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Date: 7/13/2010 6:49:00 PM
I that was very interesting. I guess I have to step it up a bit. Maybe start using some metaphors. Good work! I wrote some more, check it out! I'll be looking for ya!
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Date: 7/13/2010 3:28:00 PM
Kool continuation Diiamond, keep them posting >> James
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Date: 7/13/2010 2:46:00 PM
this was hot. you got me into the story with the first line. i have to go back and check out the other ones. what a great way to tell a story. great write.
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Date: 7/13/2010 2:22:00 PM
you have a way with words, i mean that in a good way. i like the way you use adjetives very creative
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Date: 7/13/2010 11:04:00 AM
Hi Rich. I read it, enjoyed it, and demand to know and receive the secret of writing with such brevity yet still writing quality and imaginative verse. I know I'm Irish and loose as a goose with rhetoric that ratatattats on the back of your head and shimmys and shakes as it dances a dervish of depravities length. Great write Rich. Thanks for the tip. easy
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Date: 7/13/2010 10:48:00 AM
I'll wait for the next one, but why keep us in suspense? Obviously you are a nonconformist, one of the social order's outcasts. I wait to see if the story is about you or some fictitious character who appeals to your whim. Love, Dave
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Date: 7/13/2010 9:42:00 AM
An interesting perspective on your subject of your saga, Diimond. Agape, Moses
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Date: 7/13/2010 9:32:00 AM
Good.
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Date: 7/13/2010 9:15:00 AM
this is great! the whole write is worth anyone's attention, cant wait for the next one
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Date: 7/13/2010 7:27:00 AM
Looking forward to your continuation, this one again shows your talent, Diiamond! Well written and thank you for coommenting my poems!...Wishing you a nice week!...Gert
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