Creamed

With little hope within this day..... Tomorrow arrives like spoilt milk and.......... Is the curdling basis for................. Another creamy, buttery........................ Day.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/22/2010 8:46:00 PM

I really like this one, Deb. But if tomorrow was curdled, how was it also buttery and creamy? Thanks for all your comments and how nice you have Rocky! Luv, Andrea

Thomas Kurdyla

Date: 3/7/2010 12:10:00 PM

Deborah, Wow! This really is a wonderful poem. It is so succinct, simple, and surely makes the cows come home! Tom

Faleshia Murphy

Date: 3/5/2010 10:46:00 AM

VERY NICE LOVED IT FALESHIA

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 3/2/2010 7:32:00 PM

Great ideas in simple words splash from your mind so nicely and precisely that we find only glued to them. It's a great quality my friend saying most difficult things in most simple words and is rare very rare. I remember my late Philosopher President Dr S Radhakrishnan, whose simple words used to convey deep philosophy of life. Once he wrote 'We have guns in hand, powder on face and hatred in our hearts' about modern way of living. Best wishes and love Ravindra. .D Guzzi

Syed Amaan Ahmad

Date: 2/28/2010 3:02:00 PM

excellent...no words more to explain...or express....!!!

Samir Georges

Date: 2/28/2010 2:34:00 PM

I envy and applaud your ability to inspire so much thought with such a simple message. Added to my favs.

Jimmy Anderson

Date: 2/28/2010 2:15:00 PM

Thanks for reading and leaving your kind comments for my work. I've asked Audrey to leave comments for me. ....Jimmy

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/28/2010 1:04:00 PM

Great write that should be in the winner's circle.. Good luck in the contest. Keep the creative pen flowing. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/27/2010 7:23:00 PM

A wonderful idea for double duty... an End Line Word form and contest entry.. good luck with this one Debbie... luv that title too.. thankxxx for sharing ..luv.. Linda-Marie

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 2/27/2010 5:56:00 PM

Kool one, Deb.! Thanks for using the end rhyme form for Brian's contest. Good luck in the contest. Smiles, Dane Ann

Skat A

Date: 2/27/2010 5:46:00 PM

I like what you did with this poem. Very intresting set up....

Izzy Gumbo

Date: 2/27/2010 2:15:00 PM

WOW! This is awesome Deborah! Well done! Very creative and I love the 'sidelines'... bravo!

Brian Strand

Date: 2/27/2010 12:17:00 AM

Thank you for supporting my contest Debbie.Rgds Brian

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/26/2010 11:28:00 PM

I love this creamy buttering tomorrow..Wish you and me loads of it..Charma

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/26/2010 9:12:00 PM

Hey, this is so short, but it really packs a DOLLOP. GET it heeheehee. Good luck in the contest. I want to do this one, but I fear it will take me forever. I really like this one! Luv, Andrea ps Oh, you like me, you really like me (doing my sally field impression. Is she the one who did that?)

Sara Lokken

Date: 2/26/2010 6:47:00 PM

This is a very melancholy metaphor. I hope your days get brighter. :)

Charles Henderson

Date: 2/26/2010 6:13:00 PM

Very good Deb. You maybe should think of rearranging slightly and enter as an endline. Just a thought. I like it the way it is. lol Charles

Carrie Richards

Date: 2/26/2010 5:55:00 PM

Ahh.....and the title is perfection.....melts like butter!! :)