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You comment on my poem; I on yours.
"Your rhyme, meter and wit are exquisite,"
I say.  You reply, "Yours I revisit
on the net; love how your irony gores." 

Now, seated in the bar our chat is light
for hours on synecdoche and stuff'll
spice up a poem and maybe ruffle
feathers.  Suddenly, it's time for, "Good night."

And then it dawns on me, the irony, 
that our poetry is not what our talk
is all about.  Apt metaphors might walk
me through this, but I stumble on blindly. 

"I've lots more to say," I say.  You reply,
"Okay then; your room or mine."  I sigh. 

*I've not personally met a Poetry Soup 'commentator,' but I can dream. 

Entered in Brian Strand's contest, 'Any Top Twenty Poem', February 6, 2012.  

Copyright © John Smith

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  1. Date: 9/18/2011 10:25:00 PM
    nice one John... dream on my friend....thats what i write...smiles...chiquita

  1. Date: 9/11/2011 3:38:00 PM
    Your rhyme, wit and meter are exquisite!... oh wait, that's rhyme, meter and wit. Either way :) Happy day ~N

  1. Date: 9/9/2011 5:16:00 PM
    Love the last two lines that infuse such meaning into the rest of it. So special.

  1. Date: 9/9/2011 10:23:00 AM
    LOL, one should always live in hope, John

  1. Date: 9/8/2011 6:48:00 PM
    inspection of the inner workings of the poet, keep dreaming, the 'met commentator' can come to pass, interesting view mate...

  1. Date: 9/8/2011 9:53:00 AM
    I have no problem with dreaming :) it is all good, sometimes it is all we have, thanks for the enjoyment with this one John :) I would say dream on!!

  1. Date: 9/8/2011 12:09:00 AM
    hahaha. Dream on, sweet john, dream on. (but you never know, I have several friends who met their future spouses in the poetry world!!)

    Smith Avatar John Smith
    Date: 9/8/2011 12:22:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey, you laugh, but poetry is made out of dreams.
  1. Date: 9/7/2011 10:47:00 PM
    very methaphoric write John, sounds like you have a romance in bloom enjoyed........your mate....old Jack

  1. Date: 9/7/2011 6:05:00 PM
    Very romantic work about an interesting topic..I am glad that I chose this one to read this eve..Good luck with the romantic encounter with one that you have met on soup..Thanks for the funny review of my work..Sara

  1. Date: 9/7/2011 4:50:00 PM
    an interesting impressive piece John .. direct and definite ... generalized comments sometimes are generic but many are full of emotion luv.. truly luv this one much..