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Now in the shadows a figure hides Unmerciful rain collapses on my rooftops The mind struggles to recollect lost senses You take me on a victorious voyage to the Island of Paradise Riding the waves of my intuition, I call for it “Bring us the light at the end of the tunnel,” I holler in the shade with Niagara Falls of hope I hear you call to me gently in the dead of night Why hide in the dust in the shame of frivolous defeat? We graze in fields of forever gracious flowers as we lock hands Don’t you worry—my patience is instilled in the dark You elevate me higher than the clouds drifting wistfully I trace your outline as my eyes acquaint with mystery We have a slippery escape—a ride on a dolphin’s back Staring…filled by the watery cadence We sing merrily as we approach the trail of vitality Trampled that you cannot accept my trust The waves of the ocean bubbles us up with rare grace I trace a detailed picture of you in the air We ran faster than the breeze, rapidly brewing I sketch in your panic eyes, furrowed gaze—and sigh Give us words of wisdom to uplift our troubled souls Not a cringe of movement, yet still I wait to create We have to leap into the ring of fire—but how? Imagination brought us together—now shadow, come out! Let us be brave like the lion in the prairie…send us strength Collaboration by my sister, Laura Breidenthal and David W. Breidenthal *Laura: note: We wrote line after line without seeing the others' lines, and it actually came out quite nicely I think. : ) * *David: It came out awesomely!!! Thanks for a well-written write with you, Laura!! xD * April 28, 2014

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Date: 5/28/2014 6:26:00 PM
David, yes it did come out very well. I was teasing you when I last commented. I hope you were not offended. I did mean to emphasize just how talented I think you are. Very high level of talent, sir!
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Date: 10/6/2014 9:21:00 PM
Thanks for that pun, Duke. :) Naw problem. Honestly, I am teased daily by my friends and family, so I am used to it. So is my sister - full of talent.
Date: 5/27/2014 7:53:00 PM
This is a btilliant collaboration David. I've already posted my heartfelt comment on Laura's page which celebrates your skill and soul! Immaculate friendship, there is so much care in this composition, and it is a FAV. my friend! J.A.B.
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Date: 10/6/2014 9:20:00 PM
Thank you, Justin! You're a pretty amazing poet yourself. Great way of describing a great piece like this.

Book: Shattered Sighs