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He whispered, "You're here." My fragrance consorted before me, sweet scent of summer lilacs. He placed a rose on sheets of platinum silk. Wildfires of desire in his emerald eyes, reflected in soft glimmers of a voluminous pearl moon. Seductive smile on my vermillion lips in chamber lit by amber candles. No need of their scintillation to see, I only needed to feel. Diamonds danced across a dusky sapphire sky as he breathed erotic sensations on my nape, slid a strap off the shoulder of my ginger gown. The pulse of his heart beat against my hand. My other caressed the charcoal ruff at his temple. Fuchsia blooms fluttered on the trellis window. Their aroma faded as I inhaled his balm, tasted love, savored passion until I was replete. Soft breezes swirled across warm silk sheets. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ March 13, 2016

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Date: 3/22/2016 5:56:00 PM
Hi Lin, Congratulations on your win in the contest Lin. Like rich butter spread over the toast, your words do so easily flow across the page. A beautiful write of seductive pleasure. This is most definitely a seven rating....Vlad.
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Date: 3/22/2016 5:59:00 PM
Hello Vlad. Thank you so very much for such endearing comments. They melt like that butter on my toast.
Date: 3/21/2016 7:24:00 PM
Lin, I am so happy to see this poem rate high. I loved it! #7 ;)
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Date: 3/21/2016 7:55:00 PM
Thanks again, Connie.
Date: 3/21/2016 6:53:00 AM
A shining sensual example of how to create a magnificent entry for this contest Lin! It is beautiful! #7 ;)
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Date: 3/21/2016 6:59:00 AM
Your comments are so wonderful to read. Thanks so much, Connie.
Date: 3/19/2016 8:42:00 AM
This is a beauty Lin. Such seductive imagery, I lost my place when I was reading it and had to start over.
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Date: 3/21/2016 6:59:00 AM
lol James, having to start over is quite a compliment in itself. Thank you so much. ;)
Date: 3/16/2016 8:55:00 PM
No malachite eyes? ;) This is elegant Lin, and lot of pretty word choices like "trellis window" and "ginger gown". Your most standout line? "No need of their scintillation I only needed to feel" .... they don't call them mood candles for nothing! (as if you actually need assistance in the dark) ...
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Date: 3/16/2016 10:05:00 PM
Malachite eyes have been used and overrated. Eyes closed are open? The imagination works much better when it feels with hands and heart. Thanks for your visit, Tim.
Date: 3/15/2016 6:12:00 AM
well, this isn't for underaged and also overaged (like me lol), too sensual, your use of words is great! am sure you're doing well, because this type of smoking write demands good health....nicely written and dripping with passion
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Date: 3/15/2016 7:00:00 AM
Thank you so much for such nice complimentary remarks.
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Date: 3/15/2016 6:14:00 AM
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Date: 3/15/2016 6:13:00 AM
Date: 3/14/2016 11:13:00 PM
I was going to enter the contest until I read this masterpiece... Kidding! Still am. But this is incredible!
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Date: 3/15/2016 5:38:00 AM
ha ;) I tried to make it sensual without using the obvious words. Thank you very much, Tom. I look forward to reading your entry.
Date: 3/14/2016 12:15:00 PM
I think this is excellent, Lin-- so easy to envision the words as you wrote them, great combinations as well-- a masterful write dripping in romantic allure. I enjoyed this read, thank you for posting it...great luck in the contest :)
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Date: 3/14/2016 12:56:00 PM
Thank you for so many kind comments, Sam. Your words made me smile, and thank you for reading. ~
Date: 3/13/2016 2:57:00 PM
ARE YOU KIDDING ME????? OH MY!!! LIN...you took this to ANOTHER level. Seriously. I LOVED THIS. How sensually sweet....Done with finesse. Wow. I'm touched. Loved it....Savored passion until I was replete. Oh...those must be the best words EVER! Hugs
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Date: 3/13/2016 6:40:00 PM
Thank you for so many compliments, Eileen. I appreciate everyone of them and glad you found it so appealing.

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