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Cold Water

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Below is the poem entitled Cold Water which was written by poet Jack Jordan. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Cold Water

It feels like 
cold water was just poured on me.
Okay, I’m awake now; 
you’ve got my attention. 
Are you telling me
to simplify my life 
rather than take on complications?
So, remind me:
what am I reworking, and why?
“Your life, what’s left of it, 
because your feet are glued to the ground.” 
    And how?
“Bury your locomotives and muscle cars; 
you no longer need brute power, 
clear away the thorns and sticky bits 
plugging access to your soul, 
sweep away dirt and ashes 
left from other faces, 
leave those boxes of doubt and guilt 
in a grimy alley where they belong, 
hide the clock.”
     And then?
“It may be trite, 
but give what you’ve made to those who will care, 
paint landscapes that twitter and green,
watch the moonrise then sunset and moonrise again,
learn the language of your lover, 
say goodbye when the time comes, 
help yourself lean deeply into whatever lies ahead.”

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  1. Date: 3/10/2013 10:45:00 AM
    I love the introspective quality of this piece. The back and forth, talking to yourself... it makes me think of one who is leaning on the edge of true understanding. Very apt title... and such an inspiring message... lean deeply into whatever lies ahead << you are officially one of my favorite poets on this site!

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 3/10/2013 11:03:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks! That's quite an honor. I haven't yet had time to settle in with your work, but soon...
  1. Date: 2/12/2013 10:01:00 PM
    Hello Jack, lovely advice... I'm looking forward into living a life of praise... my favorite line here is "" watch the moonrise then sunset and moonrise again,"" the thought is amazing... thank you..LINDA

    Jordan Avatar Jack Jordan
    Date: 2/12/2013 10:26:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You're more than welcome. J