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City Heat

On the street corner A flash of the brightest red This city is full of pain

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/30/2014 7:57:00 PM

a sad tale, too many people too little space. Light & Love

Joe Maverick

Date: 10/29/2014 2:09:00 AM

Nice striking write Matthew, to me there is a sense of tense, and impersonality here. how are things?

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/28/2014 11:44:00 PM

Same thing as I said for the last one. Can you make it more concrete? Give a different object in the last line that will be a juxtaposition effect of the first two lines, without naming the emotion? What was the flash of red? PUt a name to it! I enjoy seeing your haiku, Matt. And to answer your other question. I am so busy, I do not think I can even catch up with comments I got since Monday. I hate being so behind!!

M. L. Kiser

Date: 10/28/2014 2:33:00 PM

That really hit the mark!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/28/2014 12:24:00 PM

- Oh.... sad one - well done, Matthew ! - // Anne-Lise :)

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 10/28/2014 9:11:00 AM

Very effective haiku using symbolism and imagery! Well done! Pandita