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Chasing the Sun

Rushing through each day, as if I had not a care, head long toward the sun screaming, "catch me if you dare." Dripping drabs of liquid sunshine burn my deft eye. While seeking answers to the question, why, why! Why? Into the sun I run, my skin so hot and dry, as the dusky penciled pastels of twilight smear. Through tight clinched lids the sun glares, blind I'll be I fear, always grasping for truth, but my head just can't clear my thoughts on the tautly stretched canvas of my mind. Race and run and fill my lungs, still I fall behind playing catch with the sun, and all I seem to find, I'm racing toward the horizon of tomorrow. Please, one more chance, for a moment I can borrow, but blithe sun denies me, leaving me in sorrow, while in the distance the light slowly fades to dark. Truth or naught, who can say, the end is cold and stark the meaning is lost in life's fading rainbow arc, enveloping me in my sadness and despair. Dripping drabs of liquid sunshine burn my deft eye as the dusky penciled pastels of twilight smear my thoughts on the tautly stretched canvas of my mind. I'm racing toward the horizon of tomorrow while in the distance the light slowly fades to dark enveloping me in my sadness and despair.
07/29/16

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Date: 8/27/2016 4:21:00 AM
A superbly crafted piece of prose, James - This I enjoyed immensely!! Loved the way you ran each verse into the proceeding one...Very clever! My best regards. :) john P.s Goes without saying really - A seven!
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James Inman
Date: 8/27/2016 10:39:00 AM
John, such a nice comment, thank you. I have to give credit for the form to Catie, she developed it. Thank you again.
Date: 8/9/2016 8:49:00 AM
James...James...James...this is simply one of the best poems I have ever read! and I've read thousands. I'm so glad this is getting the recognition it deserves. What is the form? It's not really a couplet, with the extra line...and then the repetition of the last lines in a summary final stanza, who came up with this, this form is so appealing and intriguing? A fave and a7
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James Inman
Date: 8/11/2016 8:33:00 AM
John, your comment is so very appreciated, thank you. This was for Catie Lindsey's Crown of Couplets which is her invention. It is a couplet with a third line whose ending word has to be used as the rhyme for the following couplet. The last stanza has to use the third line of each previous stanza and, for this competition, each line had to contain 12 syllables. Thank you again for such a wonderful comment.
Date: 7/30/2016 7:28:00 PM
James, this is remarkable! Such a wonderful flow carried..congrats on your wonderful placement :)-luloo
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James Inman
Date: 7/30/2016 7:56:00 PM
Thank you Laura. I am proud to be there with you.
Date: 7/30/2016 7:15:00 PM
James, congratulations on your placement on this very short list of winners in this Premiere Contest. Your poem is very beautiful and flowing with great imagery and metaphor. 7 Sandra
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James Inman
Date: 7/30/2016 7:53:00 PM
Sandra, thank you. I am honored to be included on the list with your wonderful write.
Date: 7/30/2016 7:06:00 PM
Probably the very best one I have seen, James. Big congrats for you on that winner list. Thanks for your sweet well wishes.
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James Inman
Date: 7/30/2016 7:51:00 PM
Thanks Andrea, only well wishes for you.
Date: 7/30/2016 2:51:00 PM
I have read many poems in the past few hours and have to tell you that I am not only blown away by your smooth, successful handling of the form, I am refreshed and delighted to see punctuation, natural rhymes as opposed to forced and awkward. Truly admire your work and appreciate the clarity in form and substance. A most talented and impressive write, James, in fact, I have to say, WOW (well, I want to) ... 7 CayCay
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James Inman
Date: 7/30/2016 5:52:00 PM
Oh CayCay, of course I want to. I enjoy your writing very much. I hope you know that.
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 7/30/2016 3:54:00 PM
Hey, James - thanks, but that is not why I read / comment, please only visit if you truly wish to click over, k?
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James Inman
Date: 7/30/2016 3:31:00 PM
Thanks CayCay. I promise I'll be visiting you soon.
Date: 7/30/2016 6:57:00 AM
James, I read lots of poems yesterday, (scattered throughout the day.) At the end of my day yesterday, I was bored so, I clicked on the new poems. I'm so glad I clicked on your name. The compliment is real. Sending hugs...(read Andrea's latest :( ...) Skat
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James Inman
Date: 7/30/2016 3:28:00 PM
Thank you again SKAT. You know I love your visits, and thanks for the heads up on Andrea's poem. It broke my heart.
Date: 7/29/2016 11:55:00 PM
Honestly James, this is the best poem I've read all day... Perfect and a seven. Skat
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James Inman
Date: 7/30/2016 1:03:00 AM
Thank you SKAT. Lol, you've now left me wondering how many you've read.
Date: 7/29/2016 11:01:00 PM
Absolutely excellent with a capital E, James! I'm blown away by your creative stanzas..."as the dusky penciled pastels of twilight smear" and "my thoughts on the tautly stretched canvas of my mind" are outstanding! 7++ and a fave, should do well in the contest :)
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James Inman
Date: 7/30/2016 12:58:00 AM
Thank you Laura for the wonderful comment. This form is more difficult than I expected.

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