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Carousel

The warm summer nights when pines on the hill Seemed to talk to the creek, where the katydids spawn They would call-out their hymns, in the warm evening still With sad choirs to end, ...but the music played on........ Bill would eat cotton candy, and the children would throng To the que of the carousel, with excitement and thrill A painted horse of their own, that would take them along To his small magic world, of the carousel's mill They would sit under lights, on the fragrant green lawns And they would kiss in the dark, she would love only Bill With sad choirs to end .....but the music played on....
___________________________________________________________________ Based on the Musical Broadway Play "Carousel" For Nette's Contest: Carousel in Rondel 8/16/13

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Date: 8/20/2013 1:44:00 PM
I love your approach here .Beautifully written.Perhaps the last line should be a refrain as per Nette's contest? Or you have written a Rondeau here.
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Date: 8/19/2013 9:31:00 AM
Excellent piece Cairie.Nicely crafted.
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Date: 8/18/2013 7:39:00 AM
Good evening my dear friend Carrie! Thank you so much for sharing your precious gems. And your poem above is beyond amazing. I can imagine the very beautiful musical broadway play in your poem. Good luck always. Thank you so much for your nice comment on one of my latest poems. Have a great weekend! love lots and big hugs, Leonora
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Date: 8/17/2013 1:51:00 AM
i wish you could join to read a poem on drake s show tomorrow..You have the right voice and exceptional verses for it.
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Date: 8/17/2013 1:50:00 AM
Hi dearest Carrie this is very beautiful..Makes the reader becomes part of your story ...How sweet..how beautiful this kind of love you describe...and how sad when the sad chores end and the music continues to play without him..Carrie you make the musical Broadway play come tolife.
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Date: 8/16/2013 8:25:00 PM
What a beautiful picture you have painted in this melodious sweet Poem Carrie. You have almost made a picture with sound where the "pines on the hill Seemed to talk to the creek" and even one can imagine the scenic beauty and joy which you have narrated in your superb writes"Carousel". It is more than beautiful. You always amaze us. My good wishes for your contest entry and thank you for your sweet and encouraging words on my Independence Day Poem. Love and best wishes always..Ravindra
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Date: 8/16/2013 8:23:00 PM
ohhh, thanks carrie.. SOUPY MAIL for you!..:) huggs
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