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Brevity- the Wake

The last of the cortege had shuffled quietly away leaving him alone to face the first of countless days bending, threw one more handful of soil into the pit a final act of closure after that it would be it at the kitchen table head on hands with empty stare half eaten cheese sandwiches not going anywhere a life so rich in memories once so clear now just a blur phone rang as he gazed down and saw the number it was her submitted to –'Brevity – The Short Of It ' contest sponsor – Casarah Nance Viv Wigley 8th July 2015

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Lindsay Laurie

Date: 7/16/2015 10:48:00 PM

Hello Viv... these times can play with the mind and boy o'boy you put in a chill at the end - Lindsay

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/17/2015 12:42:00 AM

Cheers, Lindsay, nothing like a bit of spooky every now and then. Regards, Viv

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/15/2015 1:43:00 AM

Viv, Congrats on your win. Always & Forever ~LINDA~

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/17/2015 12:40:00 AM

Thanks, Linda, Viv x

Skat A

Date: 7/14/2015 12:09:00 AM

Viv, Congratulations on your sweet win. Love SKAT

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/14/2015 12:35:00 AM

Thanks, Skat, Viv x

Jan Allison

Date: 7/13/2015 12:36:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Mr Viv:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 1:25:00 PM

Thanks Viv I am so happy Cas liked the twist:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/13/2015 1:09:00 PM

Thanks, Jan, I knew yours would soar, easy peasey. Viv x

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/13/2015 8:48:00 AM

What a great story. I enjoyed it and the twist, thank you for entering, and very well done!

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/13/2015 1:08:00 PM

Thanks, Casarah, a good contest topic, reaping a good harvest. Viv x

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/11/2015 4:05:00 PM

- A unique poem, Viv - Geez ending ! - Good luck in the contest - I wish you a peaceful and blessed weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/11/2015 11:22:00 PM

Takk, Anne Lise, you have a great one, too. Viv x

Tim Ryerson

Date: 7/11/2015 2:57:00 PM

Mind blower! What a twist at the end Viv...Me thinks you got a winner here...

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/11/2015 11:17:00 PM

Thanks, Tim. Can't beat a bit of spooky every now and then. Regards, Viv

Kim Van Breda

Date: 7/9/2015 3:28:00 AM

Cool...nice twist at the end. Lots of metaphoric implications going on behind the lines too xx~xx

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/9/2015 6:41:00 AM

Thanks, Kim, it appears to have been well recieved thus far. Viv x

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/8/2015 9:53:00 PM

Great write and superb ending my friend. A7

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/8/2015 10:01:00 PM

Thanks Robert, hoping you're all hale and hearty. Regards, Viv

Kp Nunez

Date: 7/8/2015 2:44:00 PM

Oh...goosebumps! Reads like a prologue to a Stephen King novel, eh? This is good, Viv! Gl with the contest...oh, my smartphone is ringinggggggg

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/8/2015 8:43:00 PM

Thanks, Kim. Chill. wooooooo............ Viv x

Constance La France

Date: 7/8/2015 8:13:00 AM

Viv this is outstanding, 7 so haunting and what a twist at the end , a sure winner in the contest and thanks for visiting my poem, drunken

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/8/2015 12:19:00 PM

Thanks, BW, thought I'd have a double-edged sword for my title, wake being what many call the reception after a funeral, and wake as in to rouse from sleep. Viv x

Jan Allison

Date: 7/8/2015 2:06:00 AM

the spooky ending sure packs a punch - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/8/2015 2:34:00 AM

Thanks, Jan. Hang on, I'd better get that phone.......AAAARRRGGGHHH!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/8/2015 2:02:00 AM

Wow! This is really impressive Viv. It was so moving it gave me chills. 7 I hope to see it at the top.

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/8/2015 2:32:00 AM

Thanks, Connie. I wasn't overly familiar with the Brevity style, but it has much potential. Viv x

Julia Ward

Date: 7/8/2015 1:35:00 AM

I didn't expect THAT! Oh, shiver bumps at your poem's end! All the best for the contest... Julia, xx

Viv Wigley
Date: 7/8/2015 2:31:00 AM

Thanks, Julia (cue theme tune from the 'Twilight zone') doo doo doo doo..... Viv x