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I have 2 possible titles here, which one is the better title, you tell me! :)


 

I have felt the rain I have bared witness to such horrendous pain I have died a few times over I have hidden inside a smile The fresh scent of morning dew A sea faring fog, coming for a landing As I travel back to childhood days Where meadows and the sea were paradise Now in the dark of night In the dank basement of my life I have become the carpenter With hammer and saw, I build a crate Then I craft a box of lead to lay inside Then still, I mold a box of silver To lay inside the lead box Upon which I make one more box still Crafted of pure gold Artfully engraving my life on the sides I have toiled for years Creating these fine boxes and wooden crate Now comes the most difficult task of all Scalpel in hand, I cut out my beating heart I lay it softly in the golden box I seal each box one inside the other, until I seal the wooden crate The box of my heart has turned crimson red My blood the final artwork on my finely crafted piece With my last breath I fall upon the crate, quite fully dead My heart now protected, from all of romances arrows Poison arrows fall and black roses cry

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Date: 5/10/2015 2:38:00 PM
Death may be less painful than living with a broken heart... I truly enjoyed this deeply moving piece. Beautifully penned, Arthur!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 5/10/2015 9:03:00 PM
Thanks Kelly! hugs
Date: 5/10/2015 2:00:00 AM
I am seeing stars! An in depth view that conveys the tenderness of your heart!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 5/10/2015 9:03:00 PM
You are so kind Connie thank you!!!!
Date: 5/10/2015 12:30:00 AM
Oh it pricks and my heart cries for you... such profound words dear friend...hopefully with time let the fire in you douse and melt those boxes... for then you can posess your heart again and create new memories... #7.. nad
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 5/10/2015 9:02:00 PM
Thank you Poesy Relish, once a heart dies, is gone :(
Date: 5/8/2015 9:19:00 PM
I do like the title you have on it now. I really do like the ending as well. -Quite fully dead-it reminds me of the wizard of oz actually when the house fell on the witch and the munchkins were singing. Your writing takes my head in so many places that I'm sure were unintentional, you drop a pill of a write and let your words dissolve in so many directions. That's what I get out of reading you. Hugs
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 5/10/2015 9:06:00 PM
Thank you sweety! xxx
Date: 5/8/2015 11:31:00 AM
Is that so...the two options being boxes OR crates?
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Date: 5/8/2015 11:03:00 AM
I like the current title better than the two options you've given. You're so fascinated with the idea of your heart locked in a box. Thought provoking... and sad. Hugs!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 5/8/2015 11:12:00 AM
Well I know it seems 2 options, but the last line is actually part of the poem! :)
Date: 5/8/2015 4:55:00 AM
I like boxes and crates as a title
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Date: 5/8/2015 4:53:00 AM
Death only can take away the heartache of a painful romance.That is so tragic and sad.You write pain so well dear friend...as if you tasted all its sourness.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 5/8/2015 11:12:00 AM
Thank you Charmaine :)
Date: 5/8/2015 1:53:00 AM
A deep write my friend - leave your heart where it is and Throw the blinking box away Arthur!:-( Hugs Jan xx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 5/8/2015 11:11:00 AM
Thanks Jan, too late, I am heartless :(
Date: 5/7/2015 11:00:00 PM
The poem reminds me of Davy Jones :) You better keep the box carefully then. Love this!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 5/8/2015 11:10:00 AM
Thank you so much Miriam!

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