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Blood loss

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Blood loss

 
You're empty already, but still bleed more
As you open my veins and drip blood on your floor
You can’t smile; you don't laugh or put on an illusion
You just sit there blood drained, whilst you beg for transfusion.
This here’s your knife; it’s seen plenty of woes
It has travelled through time, helped you battle your foes.
Shall you slit across tracks, so it oozes when bleeds?
Or follow it down and find rest with the weeds?
A sane healthy man will find comfort in ties.
Always knows where to go, to find care, when he cries
Whilst others they yearn for their wish to come true
Whilst they suffer from blood loss, like me or like you.






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  1. Date: 3/21/2014 11:57:00 AM
    Oh mercy me Louise...This is graphic and brutally honest yet extremely compelling...I've had to get up off the deck a time or two myself so I identify...Good stuff! - Tim----PS: Soup Mail coming...

  1. Date: 3/19/2014 8:12:00 PM
    Those two lines about finds veins and arteries attract me the most, the truth in them is bare, and raw. The message as to intent of action, weep or bleed out is direct and stark. It's a shame that some people have these thoughts, and make those decisions, all we can do is wish them the best.

  1. Date: 3/16/2014 7:57:00 AM
    - A powerful poem - a deep pain ..... win or lose - Well written, Louise - Thanks for visiting on my last poem. - Have a nice Sunday. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 3/14/2014 7:02:00 PM
    This is, hard hitting write! Take no sh~t attitude! Your one strong woman I bet. I know this; your alive, and ready to fight! Stay strong: ~~~WRITE ON!~~! Louise

    Holley Avatar Louise Holley
    Date: 3/15/2014 7:15:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Larry. Get knocked down get back up hey? Always amazes me how people dont want to hear about the knocked down bit only the get up but hey ho there we go. Have read your work btw... funny stuff and seems you dont really miss much. But humble too. I like that. Tis a quality really not valued enough humility.
  1. Date: 3/14/2014 3:29:00 PM
    To me here is a lot of suffering, loss of hope; will there ever be a change?

    Holley Avatar Louise Holley
    Date: 3/15/2014 7:05:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I think we need to first recognize it is around us. It is so much easier to know it is there and to do nothing to change it or help. Experience is like diamonds we can see its value and use it to help others or we can use it only for self growth or both. Poetry is the only medium for me that enables me to use my experiences and pass them on. Take care Louise