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Blind Love

BLIND LOVE “Six to ten inches” That’s what the weatherman says Snow-blower is broke I with a very bad back And my kid will have a fit Asking him to work Do his share around the house Seems too much for him Here he comes with a buddy Says they’re going out of town Just for the weekend I say “Like hell you’re leaving! Get out the shovel!” He says “Oh, dad my shoulder I think it it’s a rotor cuff Hurt it playing ball Look! It’s late we have to go.” “To play ball?” I ask “Yes. I dribble left handed” “Do you want mom to shovel?” Then he sighs “Well no” “Well then get out the shovel!” You’d think I shot him He makes this terrible face Grabs his shoulder what a fake But then this sick smile He’s looking out the window Watching the snow fly It’s poor old mom bless her Shoveling heart full of love ............................................................. Not much of a poem - apologies. It's kind of a Tanka form I guess I couldn't resist. The situation will fit so many, many households.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 7/24/2013 2:52:00 PM
take that ice cube test, Daver and inspire yourself to do an ice king poem!!
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Date: 7/24/2013 2:51:00 PM
loving this blind love poem again. You are one of the few whose every poem I believe I have seen on soup!!!
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Date: 12/18/2010 3:26:00 PM
Daver I do really like this one. WAs it all true? I can just see an older kid being this way. I am like that kid. I will do anything to get out of hard work! Sorry I'm posting silly poems lately like the one about the doll. Wait till you see what I am posting next. It's not good, but it was for a contest I could not relate to. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 12/18/2010 1:00:00 PM
Merry Christmas to all and especially to good ole Mom. Love, joyce
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Date: 12/15/2010 12:24:00 PM
I'm not surprised, Dave. Mothers are so special..if only kids realized the gem in their lives, Mothers wouldn't have to do much. Anyway, his time will come when he can see the whole picture!! Sending blessings, peace and joy to you and your family for Christmas and always! I enjoyed this. Love, Audrey
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Date: 12/14/2010 4:47:00 PM
Mr. Dave, if you have ever read Edgar then you would know that there is no need for an apology when writing a 'Narrative' as this, and with such visual ! Your Free verse is excelent dear poet ! And; is a treasure ! And regarding my write, "Exciting my heart",the Nuance would be destroyed if I devulged mine equivocal; cunning dear Sir ! *smiles* Your wish is what is in this write, (so says I) and I impart to you ! Have a fantastic day ! I'm enjoying your past writes as well ! Much love, james
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Date: 12/14/2010 10:10:00 AM
Daver, I am glad that I don't live where it snows like that...Of course, my husband would have an electric, gas, or diesel powered whatever he would have to have so he could do that sitting down..I feel for all who have to deal with snow, sleet, and ice all winter..That God that it is rare here...The heat is bad and the humidity miserable but that cold, cold winter would be ruff...Sara
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Date: 12/13/2010 5:58:00 PM
enjoyed reading your work....too true these days. spoiled rotten kids.
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Date: 12/13/2010 4:37:00 PM
A familiar refrain and pattern these days Daver... enjoyed your expressive lines so aptly penned my friend... great visual insight ... enjoyed with luv..
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Date: 12/13/2010 1:58:00 PM
Many many people can definiately relate to this, daver
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Date: 12/13/2010 9:25:00 AM
This *@!? son needs to get his priorities straight, Daver. Still your poem made my laugh because this is the way things are today. All my parents had to do was mention, "We could have a heart attack," and we kids were out there shoveling! Times have changed, eh? Love and peace, Carolyn
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Date: 12/13/2010 8:25:00 AM
Oh do I love this!!! Yep...this situation is all too familiar ..so humorous those wimpy, excuse making guys....but that last stanza heartwarming and tender......you write poems that relate to me...very enjoyable, Daver! Happy Holidays! :)
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