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Black Swan

The stage was a dark lake, shivering with a shimmer of cygnets.
I sensed her spinning within, my swarthy, sinuous twin,
lynx-lithe, pirouetting out of my pale skin;
sweating a sootiness, slippery with suppleness,
her rosin-floured feet feeling for the floor;
inky undulations twisted from contortions at the barre.
The prickle of pitchy plumage, black feathers needling beneath skin,
the tear of talons as she danced inside my shoes; my own dark kin.

Her darkness directed the dance, manipulated props, manoeuvred me
against a night sky backdrop splintered with crushed glass stars.
She netted me in ebon tulle, nightshade wings beating in my heart.
Combined art leapt to heady heights as music swirled around us.
Her black shadow waltzed me as I whirled white satin steps;
breath gasped faster, lungs heaving, hard as the shank of my shoe.
Flooded by a flare of footlights, meshed arms and wings flailing in air;
drowning in dark waters, her swan song dancing on my tongue.

by Charlotte Puddifoot
for Nette Onclaud's 'Let's Dance' contest

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  1. Date: 4/2/2013 3:29:00 PM

  1. Date: 12/4/2012 7:00:00 PM
    I see you one first place, it certainly reads like a winner. Congrats.

  1. Date: 12/4/2012 6:58:00 PM
    Simply gorgeous, enjoyed this dark dance. I also enjoyed the movie, very disturbing yet somehow satisfying like this Poem.

  1. Date: 7/8/2012 3:49:00 PM
    It seems that I cannot get enough of your fine writing. There are so many lines here that are choice in their expression-alliterative metaphor skillfuly employed. It's hard to tear myself away from your site, it is such a feast for the eyes, the intellect, and indeed the spirit.

  1. Date: 3/19/2012 8:53:00 AM
    Congratulations on your win in Nette's "Let's Dance" contest Charlotte. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/18/2012 3:09:00 AM
    Charlotte congrats on your win..David

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 10:35:00 PM
    Nice words are used,Charlotte.Congratulations on your well deserved win!

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 5:20:00 PM
    A very well deserved win, my friend. I sure remember this one. Congratulations.

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 3:31:00 PM
    So much lovely images don't know which one to comment, love the crushed glass stars the best, awesome poetry Charlotte, honored to share a place with you, hugs love vie

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 2:21:00 PM
    macabre, twisted, beautiful, charlotte!... you got me reeling with an unusual approach of the theme... congrats on your win in my contest! :) hugggs!

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 12:10:00 PM
    congrats Charlotte on a lovely first place win for this lovely expressive write on lets dance luv..

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 12:01:00 PM
    Congratulations on your imaginative poem and win. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 5:56:00 AM
    Completely worthy of this first place honor, Char. You orchestrated one beautiful dance! I will be back to read this one again and again. Elegant to say the least!! Love, Gwendolen

  1. Date: 3/16/2012 10:19:00 AM
    Awesome, nothing but a winning piece.. splattered throughout with images of highly defined creative visuals. Love how you chose 'Black Swan' for this contest. I'm glad to have come to read this today Charlotte..huggs dear

  1. Date: 3/15/2012 8:02:00 PM
    You saw the movie. It was good. P.s. my last piece is not about you. Hopefully.

  1. Date: 3/14/2012 7:37:00 PM
    Charlotte, Black Swan was one of my very favorite movies of the last year when it did so well with Oscars. This really catches the mood of that movie and of that dance. VERY good writing here. I can't see this anything other than a top place from Nette.

  1. Date: 3/14/2012 6:33:00 PM
    Very descriptive and expressive work..Reads like winning material..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

  1. Date: 3/14/2012 5:42:00 PM
    oooooo very nice Ms. Puddifoot........ thrilling