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Bitter Sweet

There she was just a few feet away Glossed lips Powdered face Faux lashes Contoured cheeks We locked eyes then she looked away cold and distant Maybe she was tempting me to walk in her fire She was sweet like sugar Sugar is what tempts us pouring upon our wildest fantasies Sugar gives us cavities rots our teeth our soul our world It seems vanity is always in style...

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Liam Mcdaid

Date: 12/14/2014 2:51:00 PM

smiling ken old pal the pen flowing beautiful as always i see

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/1/2014 1:21:00 PM

beauty in its natural form is sweet, false glamor is bitter.. what better way to convey this with your stellar write, ken!.. huggs

Ken Carroll
Date: 12/1/2014 1:26:00 PM

Thank you Nette!

Thomas Carney

Date: 11/30/2014 8:12:00 AM

Right on with this one and the power of free standing lines. Great job at no cluttered end of sentence punctuation, and a perfect format for this discourse. Women are sheer beauty, and many are conditioned to exploit that. My take, as a former sexual addict to pornography, now free, is how we objectify women. Men are visual, so this piece is the normality for a man, who hopefully gets the chance to meet this woman. Congrats , Thomas

Ken Carroll
Date: 11/30/2014 12:20:00 PM

Thank you Thomas!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/29/2014 11:07:00 PM

Me thinks there is more than one meaning here! Great poem!!!

Ken Carroll
Date: 11/29/2014 11:24:00 PM

Thank you Arthur!

Skat A

Date: 11/29/2014 11:03:00 PM

WOW, Ken, so true! can't help myself at times. SKAT

Ken Carroll
Date: 11/29/2014 11:23:00 PM

Thanks for visiting Skat!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/29/2014 10:00:00 PM

Yes too much sugar rotten the teeth and gives us diabetees : ).I git the point of your concept here. Indeed not all that glitters is golden dear friend.

Ken Carroll
Date: 11/29/2014 10:39:00 PM

Thank you Charmaine!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/29/2014 6:38:00 PM

:( Sorry that taste turned bitter in the end, Ken. This is a powerful right.

Ken Carroll
Date: 11/29/2014 10:32:00 PM

Always appreciated Eileen!

Jan Allison

Date: 11/29/2014 5:48:00 PM

this truly is bitter sweet ken - great descriptive write:-) hugs jan xx

Ken Carroll
Date: 11/29/2014 10:29:00 PM

Thank you Jan!

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 11/29/2014 5:17:00 PM

O my dear friend Ken that was so bitter sweet indeed. It seems vanity is always in style...wow! Wow! Then maybe that was your beautiful Barbie window shopping sweets. That Barbie can get very vain look all her latest fashion and beauty collections..lol...Lol very nice poem! Really enjoyed it! Have a wonderful evening! :) Love and hugs! xxx D.

Ken Carroll
Date: 11/29/2014 10:29:00 PM

Thanks for visiting Dorian!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/29/2014 5:15:00 PM

...... Hmmm, maybe she was a little too sweet :))) - Great poem, Ken - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Ken Carroll
Date: 11/29/2014 10:27:00 PM

Thank you Anne!