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Big Red Bellied Black Snake

Dad had threatened for some time, to reclaim the land behind the shed, where rubbish over many years, had stockpiled but now instead of being easy to be shifted, blackberries, docks and thistles grow, entwining history of ours… and you know we didn’t know. Mum cracked the whip one Sunday, handing out the different tools for us to shovel, fork, pick and slash; of course she made the rules. We weren’t to stop until the rubbish, had been cleared and left to show a barren space to be landscaped… and you know we didn’t know. Johnny parked the truck close to where we’d easily load the tray. First we had to slash blackberries, to open up a pathway. Old fencing wire and bent droppers, we pulled and tugged. The work was slow. Plus bits of motors, old oil filters… and still we didn’t know. The ‘Old Man’ knocked a stump out I can’t remember being a tree, it disintegrated into pieces; white ant workings I could see. Plastic pots and old fuel drums, onto the tray we heave and throw. Just on half the plots been cleaned up now… and still we didn’t know. A concrete trough and a mattress spring, mesh from an old birdcage. A kitchen sink broken in two and a pushbike at some stage. Sardine tins, a barrow bowl, and a seized up mower that won’t mow, now there’s just one corner left to clean… and still we didn’t know. A stack of roofing iron near the fence; the last that had to go. One by one we dragged the rusting sheets… and still we didn’t know. Dad picked up the final sheet, and then he quickly threw it down again. His face was white and ‘cripes’ he shook… we ‘bloody-well’ knew then.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 10/3/2015 11:55:00 AM
Was it poisonous? Hope not. Had a few of both end up in my yard with a ground hog... after construction in the area... Good story. He'll clear out when every thing is cleaned up...
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Date: 9/22/2015 2:02:00 PM
Lindsay, you had me at the edge of my seat. Yikes! Sneaks are creators I stay away from. Wonderful write Hugs Eve
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/25/2015 1:18:00 AM
Thank you Eve for dropping by with your view on snakes. If you give them a place to hide and there is a mouse or two around, then you will have a resident snake - thank you Eve - Lindsay
Date: 9/22/2015 9:18:00 AM
Actually i'm going to fav this one, with a view to posting a link to it on my twitter site. Just let me know if you are ok. with that.
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/25/2015 1:24:00 AM
Good as gold Scott... I'm sure you've had some sort of experience when having a clean up. Snakes are opportunists who take advantage of any human oversight to allow rodents a free run in outdoor sheds - thanks mate - Lindsay
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Date: 9/22/2015 9:20:00 AM
oops looks like I got the wrong button, and tweeted the link already. Hope you don't mind.
Date: 9/22/2015 9:16:00 AM
Excellent write. You have an easy way of bringing a smile to my face. Thank you.
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Date: 9/21/2015 7:11:00 PM
This calls to mind all the things that farmers save probably thinking they may be of use some day. Is it that, or they can't bother with the effort? You are very clever and so much fun.
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/25/2015 1:28:00 AM
Hello Duke... that's exactly it... and once grass grows through it, rodents move in and so do the snakes for an easy dinner and a comfy home - thank you Duke - Lindsay
Date: 9/21/2015 11:51:00 AM
Full of suspense, as always, Lindsay. You did give us a clue with your title. Always a pleasure to read you, Lindsay. hugs!
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/25/2015 1:32:00 AM
Hello Kim... thank you Kim. I had to use that title elsewise anyone who hasn't lived in a rural environment would wonder what was going on - catch you soon Kim - Lindsay
Date: 9/20/2015 4:18:00 PM
You always tell a good story. I LOVE reading your writings. You should put them in a book, like short stories and the like....good day Lindsay:-)
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/25/2015 1:35:00 AM
G'day njeri... thank you once again for your support and encouraging comment njeri. I'll catch you soon - Lindsay
Date: 9/20/2015 2:25:00 PM
Laurie: I remember so many scenes like this where we would jump at a piece of hose lying in the grass....ha ha Yes I remeber we would always lift a sheet of discarded tin with a long handled shovel. Great storytelling and it is in my fav poems list. Thanks for sharing your stories. I love to read them.
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/25/2015 1:40:00 AM
Hello Suzanne... loved your comment. The rubber hose or stick always had its way after we had seen a snake and I'm glad that I've got someone who has shared the experience - thank you - Lindsay
Date: 9/17/2015 2:16:00 AM
I think you may be the King of story tellers here Lindsay! This poem was gripping and suspenseful with a great ending! I adored your repeating lines and couldn't wait to get to the end. 7
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/25/2015 1:45:00 AM
Hello Connie... thank you for reading and placing your kind comment. This is a common occurrence where there's a lack of yard maintenance and by gosh a snake has a way of jangling the nerves - regards Connie - Lindsay
Date: 9/16/2015 9:03:00 PM
glad to know that nobody died!
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Date: 9/16/2015 1:58:00 AM
thank goodness for the title. we are on the edge of our seats waiting for it and then WHAT?? What happened next?? Oh no, you did not SAY!
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/16/2015 2:24:00 AM
Hello Andrea... I did change the title for the very reason you stated. I understood that a snake was present, but unless you've had the pleasure of an unpleasant meeting like this you may not know. What happened next? Plenty of composure and reassurance - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
Date: 9/16/2015 12:36:00 AM
A white knuckle poem, Lindsay, and captured that looming 'oh, sh*t' feeling you get when delving into outside junk. Much enjoyed. Regards, Viv
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/16/2015 2:16:00 AM
G'day Viv... yes, you don't even stop to think Viv. Survival reaction steps in and then personal hygiene can become a problem - Lindsay
Date: 9/15/2015 9:13:00 PM
Such lapel-grabbing suspense; it kept me hanging onto every line. Superb, as usual, Lindsay.
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/15/2015 9:54:00 PM
Thank you once again Paul for your positive comment - Lindsay
Date: 9/14/2015 10:32:00 PM
IS THAT SNAKE THERE A BAD ONE? Great poem, sure reads like it truly happened! A7
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/15/2015 6:59:00 PM
G'day Robert... it is venomous but a bite is rarely fatal, but it is a big snake. It's happened a few times when picking up stuff where they hide - thanks Robert - Lindsay
Date: 9/13/2015 9:03:00 PM
Excellent day. Mom got what she wanted and you all pitched in together.
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/15/2015 6:54:00 PM
Thank you Tim... yes, but the snake had us all running off together - Lindsay
Date: 9/13/2015 8:17:00 PM
I enjoyed your poem. Thank you.
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Lindsay Laurie
Date: 9/15/2015 6:44:00 PM
Hello Pam... thanks for your comment Pam. I'm pleased that you enjoyed the poem - Lindsay

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