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Beneath In My Heart

Beneath in my heart, behind all my thought Being then, Dad, you were always my part Fingers that I held, while passing the road Freezing to ice cold before I discern you are dead When the time would never run rearward I wonder, why one’s mind should? O’ the days with you, all the hurts I gave you Floods out my eyes, as your skin turns blue No one wants an end but everyone finds it in end I ponder, why lord wend such a trend? O’ rather he tends to, befriend Him as an end! Makes all to intend, towards their beloved Beneath in my heart, behind all my thought Every then, Dad, you were always my part Knowing I could hold your hand with my end I do wipe my tears and watch your eyes closed

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 6/3/2010 10:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round Chardru. I wish you the best in the finals. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/31/2010 2:51:00 PM
Congratulations on making it through the first round of the Poetry Soup contest with this poem. Best wishes in the finals. Karen
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Date: 5/29/2010 12:07:00 PM
well done on the poem, enjoyed, have a nice memorial day. ALSO Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week,..p.d.
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Date: 5/28/2010 7:17:00 PM
Chandru -Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week, God Bless, mj
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Date: 5/25/2010 9:13:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week. A wonderful verse, I enjoyed the read. Caryl
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Date: 5/25/2010 5:22:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Chandru. May you have many more features and may you find loads of inspiration along the way. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/24/2010 1:46:00 PM
Many congrats on your wonderful heartfelt piece being featured this week. Rgds Janette
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Date: 5/23/2010 3:54:00 PM
I really like the last stanza. The emotion comes through your words. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 4/13/2009 5:42:00 PM
classiq, I understand, well written, jmg
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Date: 4/2/2009 4:36:00 AM
Death is so final and painful... The part of this poem that I like best is "Every then, Dad, you were always my part. Knowing I could hold your hand with my end." It shows so much love. You're lucky. Some children have dads too busy to hold their hands. The third verse has a lot of internal rhyme that makes you stop and think about what is being said. Nice write.
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Date: 4/2/2009 3:10:00 AM
Beneath my heart, behind all my thought, such an interesting line. Nice job and so glad you're souping
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Date: 4/2/2009 12:29:00 AM
A sad, yet so touching tribute. The line "Floods out my eyes, as your skin turns blue" is extremely powerful!
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Date: 3/27/2009 3:45:00 PM
Such a fine write and I loved it, well done! Welcome to soupland! Ernesto
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Date: 3/26/2009 8:09:00 AM
Fathers do little tribute, its nice to know that after death someone still feels love for them. A good poem can ease any sorrow, God bless you.
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