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Being Alone With Her

I see You by yourself Distant Distance Seperates you From me My heart Screams to be held Needed Need calls Beckons your touch I scream Screaming Craving your love Lonely Alone In the same room So lost Losing The best of me To you Your smile Gave me reason To live Life wanes Shaded by grey Brush stokes Brushing My shattered heart Away Check out my Mussetle Train Contest. Note; this is a work of fiction.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 12/7/2014 9:56:00 AM
Love this form you created Richard. I still have not had any luck with it. I am sure once it kicks in I will write with ease but still nothing yet. I like to think of it more like a bracelet or a necklace depending on the length. How every piece links in to the next like a gold or silver chain.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/11/2014 6:50:00 PM
I have no doubt you will come up with something exquisite.
Date: 12/4/2014 9:50:00 PM
very beautifully crafted richard
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/5/2014 9:01:00 AM
Thanks Liam.
Date: 12/3/2014 12:19:00 AM
Beautifully poignant. It echoes the lonely cries of many hearts. Kim Patrice
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/5/2014 9:01:00 AM
Thanks Kim.
Date: 12/2/2014 7:08:00 PM
I like how one stanza bleeds into the other!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/2/2014 7:45:00 PM
Interesting choice of words. Based on the content, "bleeds" is the perfect descriptor.
Date: 12/2/2014 6:48:00 AM
This is amazingly powerful and emotional. The 6th stanza just screams out its sadness.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/2/2014 7:44:00 AM
Thanks Monterey, I would be honored if you give it a go.
Date: 12/1/2014 4:03:00 PM
I am so thankful this is fiction. Hope you have a wonderful time with Edith.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 4:09:00 PM
Thanks, mom will be here on the 12th. We are looking forward to seeing her.
Date: 12/1/2014 3:43:00 PM
Beautiful thoughts in so few words! I love this form...thank you, Richard, for the inspiration to try something new! Hugs, Rhonda
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 3:53:00 PM
Thanks Rhonda, I'm looking forward to a trip on your Train. Toot! Toot!
Date: 12/1/2014 11:28:00 AM
I am loving these poems Richard thanks for introducing this form to us:-) hugs jan xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 11:31:00 AM
Thanks Jan!

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