Bedtime - a Pantoum
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The pattern in each stanza is where the second and fourth line of each verse is repeated as the first and third of the next. The pattern changes though for the last stanza to the first and third line are the second and fourth of the stanza above (penultimate). The last line is a repeat of the first starting line of the poem and the third line of the first is the second of the last.
For example, a four stanza poem would look like this ...
1234 2546 5768 7381 ... this can go on indefinitely, just as long as it loops back to the original stanza, in the final one! Can use rhyme or no rhyme, but it's up to you ...
... but then I see those inquiring eyes, that familiar look:
my brother wants me to tell him a story.
"It's way past your bedtime, you're just gonna doze!"
As he begs incessantly, "Pretty please, please,"
My brother wants me to tell him a story:
the one with the dragon and the king.
As he begs incessantly, "Pretty please, please,"
Until finally I just give in.
"The one with the dragon, and the king,
the pretty princess, and the slimy frog!"
Until finally I just give in
(as usual he's passed out like a log)
"The pretty princess and the slimy frog!"
"It's way past your bedtime, you're just gonna doze!"
As usual he's passed out like a log,
but then I see those inquiring eyes, that familiar look.
Written March 19th, 2016
For the Pantoum Contest Hosted by Eve Roper
Copyright © Timothy Hicks | Year Posted 2016
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