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Bearded Snow

receding darkness uncovers the cities cold bright sun on bearded snow 3/16/2015 submitted to TANKA 2 - Poetry contest

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Michael Dom

Date: 3/24/2015 12:08:00 PM

A frost bitten image. Nice write- congrats.

Paul Callus

Date: 3/24/2015 10:16:00 AM

A lovely Tanka with great imagery. #7 Congratulations on a very merited win. // paul

Kim Merryman

Date: 3/23/2015 10:25:00 PM

John, congrats on your win with this fantastic tanka! Love, Kim

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/23/2015 1:29:00 PM

Hi John, congratulations on your fine win for your Tanka! Sandra

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/22/2015 1:54:00 PM

John, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2015 9:14:00 PM

John, although I was unsure about one thing, I just had to give this a top win for being so GOOD with the bearded snow image! When you say the cities cold, do you mean cities' (like many cities)? congrats for your win. Also loved the clever way you described dawn as receding darkness.

John Lawless
Date: 3/22/2015 6:43:00 AM

Thanks Andrea for another interesting tanka torture. The "cities" line could have gone either way as all the cities in New England got buried in record snowfall this winter.

Constance La France

Date: 3/16/2015 3:13:00 PM

John, this is a great tanka for the contest, best of luck and thanks so much for your thoughtful comment and my fine placement in your contest with my poem, I write poems . . .

John Lawless
Date: 3/22/2015 6:44:00 AM

Thanks for your support and comments, always appreciated.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/16/2015 9:46:00 AM

Interesting work..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for reading and considering my poem in your contest..Sara

John Lawless
Date: 3/22/2015 6:45:00 AM

Thank you, Sara,

Robert Heemstra

Date: 3/16/2015 9:08:00 AM

...and soon that snow will be all gone. Good luck with the contest,

John Lawless
Date: 3/22/2015 6:45:00 AM

....but not soon enough.....the fish await