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Barred Revelations

Brain rewired The spine of prison rattles Hearts harden Hungry dogs Chomp on the bars and the bones Of his hope He is lost Dreams and fears confirm his tears Time is gone Guilty truths Drizzle down his swollen cheeks “God, I’m yours. . . Lift my eyes For your light is my way to Shame my foes. . . My clothes droop My body slumped against death This soul swells. . . I need her. . . If only you knew how much I miss her. . . I need You For You have stayed here with me Patiently. . .” The sun peeks His sad eyes take in the warmth His heart melts We are free The sky is open to you Now Stay Strong 9/12/2015

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Lenny Gazbowski

Date: 5/12/2016 8:25:00 PM

Glorious collection of senyrus.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 9/22/2015 7:13:00 PM

Dear Laura What a great work, very expressive and emotionally done, you show a great talent, my fellow souper, and thanks for your review of my Black Beard, it was alot of fun to write about this legend, I love history, and with Halloween coming up I could not resist the challenage Linda gave to me. Can't wait for October and My Halloween festival I've been working on new writes for months, and linda knows my weakness for this haunted month of the year, it's not just for kids anymore, lol cheri

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 9/22/2015 7:27:00 PM

I am looking forward to some more spooky compositions from you, Cheri! Thank you for visiting again; you're very sweet! ~Laura

Duke Beaufort

Date: 9/21/2015 7:19:00 PM

I like the title and what it suggests. I have been very busy, and that kills my motivation. You have to understand that at times I retreat to prison myself. Being free requires quite a bit of effort. At least in prison there's time to reflect. I do and always will have a soft spot for you and this body of work of yours. Remarkable.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 9/21/2015 11:36:00 PM

I love how you express to me how my poetry relates to your own life, in such a specific and intelligent way, Duke. I admire your reviews and appreciate the wonderful praise. It really boosts my confidence. Thank you! ~Laura

Max Corvus

Date: 9/16/2015 9:23:00 AM

So beauteous! Dark, gritty and romantic.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 9/16/2015 2:05:00 PM

Thanks Max!! Glad to have you read. :) ~Laura

Justin Bordner

Date: 9/13/2015 7:27:00 PM

Prisons are places that punish us into awakening. This poem is all about the loyalty of love. My heart understands the need in this eloquently righeteous poem Laura...J.A.B. A FAV! P.S. Heart Of Gold from Birdy is very beautiful, your heart fights beautifully.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 9/14/2015 1:08:00 AM

I'm obsessed with the song! (listening to it right now honestly) I am glad you liked it, dear.. I knew you'd understand! ~Laura