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At the Pawn Shop

Purple neon lured the leery into the shop’s maw. Aged asphalt tiles buffed by an old brush-spinner reflected the loot. The bits and pieces of people’s lives, hung on pegs, or hid behind glass. Ashamed, ashamed of the negligence of their owners, lost, lost, most never would return home, unlike the Velveteen Rabbit. They were not real. Only items of some value arrived here. Into the belly of the beast, for their owners had been truly gutted. Each shelf and case, each peg and hook, a repository for the flotsam and jetsam of someone’s life, lost, pay-back for misspent youth and the poverty of age. They were not real. Sometimes, on brighter days their delinquent owners would return, greenbacks in hand, tears in their eyes, and a stray bit would be retrieved. These bits were ALMOST real, with a bit more love maybe, they’d both be real.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 6/18/2015 5:25:00 PM
I like this. I bet you could play with line breaks here and internal spacing.. especially the lost, lost... You know, you and I should watch each other for favoured words. (I am neurotic and check not only my one poem, but the full contents of my submissions for repetition that is not intentional. ) You like MAW. Still, everything else here reads as very original, fresh. Me? I love clocks and time and I think I need to go through my work to see if I focus too much on one subject...
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Date: 7/9/2013 9:46:00 AM
Congrats on your winning poem.
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Date: 7/9/2013 7:22:00 AM
Debbie, never so well expressed, "bits and pieces of people's life hung on pegs or his behind glass.." Congratulations on your fine win.
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Date: 7/9/2013 7:20:00 AM
A masterful job. The velveteen Rabbit brought back memories. We read that book to Matthew when he was little. Now he is 22. Congrats on a fine win, for me one of the best.
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Date: 7/9/2013 12:48:00 AM
ha I love it .... congrats all the way :-) ~SKAT~
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Date: 7/8/2013 10:28:00 PM
My favorite so far, Debbie. Love, Joyce
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Date: 7/8/2013 9:45:00 PM
Touching. CONGRATS ON UR WIN. GL.
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Date: 7/5/2013 10:56:00 AM
Debbie, I wish I could see the inside of a pawn shop the way you do... This is a winner... Girl, your talent is really spotlighted in this entry.... I loved it.... Jake
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Date: 6/28/2013 1:26:00 AM
oh I just love the allusion to the velveteen rabbit, always one of my adored childhood tales. This is EXCELLENT work and is one of my favorites in her contest.
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