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At the Footbridge 2

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With trembling fingers I’d opened the bloodstained envelope But I shouldn’t have been surprised at the state of the paper … you work as a butcher Your message was short - Meet me at the footbridge at midnight I’ll bring the blue tartan blanket .. I have a surprise for you My heart skipped a beat when I recall the last time we met We had a moonlight feast then made mad passionate love Our bodies rising and falling like the tide Then came crashing back down to earth on the blue tartan blanket I hastily gathered together some tasty treats for our picnic then put on my white gypsy top with black ribbon lacing which accentuated my curvaceous figure You could feast your eyes on me whilst we dined! Hurrying along the towpath; my black cloak swirled in the autumn breeze I felt like red riding hood carrying my brown wicker basket I could see you standing on the footbridge Your huge frame silhouetted in the moonlight You ran to greet me and your lips crushed into mine Arm in arm we strolled to the shelter of the gnarled oak tree I spread out the blanket, unpacked the picnic and we ate hungrily You asked me to close my eyes …I smiled and waited for my surprise Two days later a dismembered body was found Lying on a blood soaked tartan blanket 24th August 2016

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Warren Dickman

Date: 2/8/2024 10:07:00 AM

It's gruesome, but hopefully could wake up some foolish young women to the ever-present danger out there!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/14/2017 6:07:00 PM

I came by to read this one again too!!! I love the dark ones! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/14/2017 6:15:00 PM

Thanks Arthur I do appreciate your continued support - the blog has caused a renewed interest in the collaboration poem and I am adding more poems to it as they come in:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/27/2016 9:16:00 AM

Hi Jan, I didn't know where you were going with this one. But I must say you had my full attention and the twist at the end was just brilliant. A without a doubt seven: -) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 6/14/2017 7:40:00 AM

Thanks Alexis sorry I've just seen your comment:-( hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/25/2016 8:52:00 PM

Wow, I am getting out stalked by Seren and Jan! I better stock up on some new poems!!! Great one Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/25/2016 8:58:00 PM

ha ha ha I'm amazed Seren wrote such a dark stalker poem on the same day - we must be influenced by you lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts

Date: 8/25/2016 1:41:00 AM

Lol Jan it's so funny we both did a second Stalker poem at same time . Great one my friend .... Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 8/25/2016 1:42:00 AM

It's because we know the same person lol - he's the link lol lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe

Date: 8/25/2016 12:24:00 AM

Wow - fantastic write - you are certainly a great story teller - extremely vivid. Scary thoughts though. Mark

Jan Allison
Date: 8/25/2016 1:11:00 AM

Thanks Mark its a little bit of a change from my humourous writes!:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Schneiter

Date: 8/24/2016 6:43:00 PM

Jan, Among the countless things at which you excel is creating a mood. Virtually every word in this masterful write has been chosen with that in mind. That is what makes the ending so shocking and so powerful. Magnificently done, Jan. hugs xxx Paul

Jan Allison
Date: 8/25/2016 1:10:00 AM

Thanks Paul - a little bit od a dark read for me but I have no control over my muse I never know what she will come up with next!:-) hugs Jan xx

Thomas Martin

Date: 8/24/2016 5:39:00 PM

Hi Jan, So sorry not to be around lately but will always remember you as a special poetic friend and a mutual lover of islands! This one is wonderful, Jan, and the ending is quite a surprise! Take care. . . Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 5:42:00 PM

So lovely to see you back Thomas - its a little dark and away from my usual humourous style but I had to go with the twist at the end ... I do worry about my muse some times! Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 8/24/2016 4:55:00 PM

What a contrast when compared to your Footbridge1, Jan! Entertained by the narrative and final twist. I am wondering whether any missing body parts were on sale in the meat shop!! ~ Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 5:02:00 PM

ha ha ha Paul - yes it is a total contrast but I thought the title was worth using for this one too:-) I do worry about my muse as I have no idea where the inspiration for this poem came from lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Vincent Flannery

Date: 8/24/2016 4:46:00 PM

Wow! That was a very well written piece and the ending was a total shocker. Great writing throughout. Look forward to reading part 1. Take care!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 4:53:00 PM

Part one is a limerick I wrote and about 17 other poets added their lines - its a total contrast to this poem which is far from my usual humourous style:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 8/24/2016 1:01:00 PM

Reminds me of Jack the Ripper...excellent write Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 1:50:00 PM

Thanks Tim:-) I have no idea where the idea came from and this is a pretty dark write for me but I have to go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 8/24/2016 12:22:00 PM

Must have been a dietary reaction of some sort. Her bad... Loved it!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 12:25:00 PM

LOL Charlie - it's a little different to my usual humourous style, but I have to go with the flow of my muse and she wanted a twisted ending:-) hugs jan xx

Wendy Rycroft

Date: 8/24/2016 11:14:00 AM

What a surprise at the end, I was shocked, very very captivating but that was the idea, did not expect that, can I not go back in time and warn her, could your next story be a time traveler, a beautiful handsome prince who saves her x Excellent x well written x

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 11:27:00 AM

Thanks Wendy - I have absolutely no idea what inspired this write I have no control over my muse - will see if the muse comes up with a sequel:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/24/2016 10:46:00 AM

Poor "curvaceous figure" it is no longer accentuated. What a pity for such a built up to have this tragic end! Fascinating and captivating story, enjoyed it a lot but the...conclusion! Great writing dear, Jan, or should I say...Agatha? A seven!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 11:28:00 AM

LOL Demetrios I wanted the story to have a surprise ending and from the reaction in the comments I think I achieved my aim:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 8/24/2016 10:42:00 AM

Jan, this is a great sequel! :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 11:29:00 AM

The title is the only link lol:-) I don't know if my muse can come up with another tale even I am surprised at the ending of this one lol:-) hugs jan xx

Jean Murray

Date: 8/24/2016 9:04:00 AM

Not a quell bonne surprise for you then Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 9:14:00 AM

Not at all Jean!:-) hugs jan xx

Lynn Marie

Date: 8/24/2016 8:34:00 AM

This is fantastic Jan :-) A 'noir' poetic tale woven as expertly as the "brown wicker basket"...with great passion, mystery and your famous 'trademark' ..humour. A definite fave, 7+..A terrific read :-) blessings, lynn

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 9:40:00 AM

The dietitian said plain choc is ok as are most things in moderation ...and not to bother with 'diabetic' foods at all:-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie
Date: 8/24/2016 9:14:00 AM

Ooh..I feel for him...there is diabetic chocolate..I will check here for quality ones :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 8:59:00 AM

MMM maybe not he's now diabetic!:-( hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie
Date: 8/24/2016 8:54:00 AM

...lol oh well there is always chocolate :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 8:44:00 AM

Thanks Lynn - I read it to hubby over the phone I think he was all for dashing home until the ending lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings

Date: 8/24/2016 8:21:00 AM

Very dark but funny, Jan, lol. Barry

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2016 8:25:00 AM

Thanks Barry - It just a LITTLE bit different to my normal style lol but I have to go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs Jan xx