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Risking his life, he does not see the end. Living his days as there were more to come. Blind to the truth that's coming 'round the bend. Recklessly thinking he has time to spend, Wastes the good days, ensnared by demon rum. Risking his life, he does not see the end. Day after day in one another blend. The wiles of drink have caused him to succumb. Blind to the truth that's coming 'round the bend. So many good men can't bad habits mend. The wake up call won't come in time for some. Risking his life, he does not see the end. His friends all beg, he's too good at pretend. He marches only to his lover's drum. Blind to the truth that's coming 'round the bend. His senses gone, he struggles in bedlam. Nor notes the slowing of the pendulum. Risking his life, he does not see the end. Blind to the truth that's coming 'round the bend.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 7/6/2010 7:27:00 AM
This is so very good, Joyce, I had to read it twice! COngratulations on your 5th Place win! Definitely goes to my favs. There's a saying from someplace that says, "What you love is what takes you out." True in this case. Love, audrey
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Date: 7/3/2010 12:46:00 PM
Great entry and a worthy win. Enjoy your winnings. keep up the great work. Love, Adeleke
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Date: 7/3/2010 8:22:00 AM
Beautifully done, Joyce!! Congratulations on this challenging villanelle, and your well deserved win! ~ Carrie
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Date: 7/3/2010 6:37:00 AM
Congrats Joyce on your winning poem in Dr. Ram's contest with this awesome write and win .. I agree with Andrea.. a great topic to choose for your theme .. enjoy another victory dance my friend.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii.. watching fireworks ..at 3 a.m...AlohA..
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Date: 7/3/2010 12:32:00 AM
great topic you chose, and congrats on your win. Iam seeing you here so much lately (in winner circles, I mean)! Luv, andrea
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Date: 7/2/2010 11:13:00 PM
Congratulations Joyce on your 5th place. Agape, Moses
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Date: 7/2/2010 10:40:00 PM
Congrats on the 5th place win in my contest
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Date: 6/14/2010 2:52:00 PM
Fantastic Villanelle. Risking his life, he does not see the end. Blind to the truth that's coming 'round the bend. They don't get much better than this. Fantastic!!!
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Date: 6/6/2010 7:07:00 PM
GOOD entry, JOyce. These are challenging for people to do and you pulled it off. thanks for your comments today. LUv ya, Andrea
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Date: 6/6/2010 5:19:00 PM
The topic chosen is a problem for so many men and women this day and age...Sad that a wake-up call doesn't happen sooner for more...Good luck if for a contest...Keep the creative pen flowing...Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara
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Date: 6/6/2010 4:19:00 AM
Thanks for supporting my contest. Joyce
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Date: 6/6/2010 2:17:00 AM
A terrific poem. No risk,no gain cheers suresh
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Date: 6/5/2010 10:43:00 PM
Really good! Heck of a write.
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Date: 6/5/2010 10:29:00 PM
Joyce, a terrific Villanelle. I laboered over this form but fell well short of your masterpiece. This fits the form and stays true to your story. I am impressed with your talent. Great job. Joe
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Date: 6/5/2010 10:23:00 PM
Excellent, Joyce. We often don't see what is "coming 'round the bend." At least this man has "his lover's drum" to guide him along, though that lover is deep inside an empty bottle. Remarkable use of a the villanelle form! Love, Carolyn
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