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Ars Poetica

A poem should be smooth and flat As a jagged rock A poem should wander As well as be expected Wandering through a mind Still minding it's own business A poem should laugh and cry As we wade through tiered rivers A poem should drown us As we take in breath Liquid life forming gills Filtering our bottled fear A poem should be intoxicating As cutting as a broken glass I'm not sure if I understand the form but I gave it a go.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 6/19/2015 3:25:00 PM
I don't know about this form, but I know that you rock poetry, Richard. :) Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/20/2015 12:30:00 AM
Thanks and a big smile and hug back Eileen.
Date: 6/14/2015 7:01:00 PM
Well done Richard. I like how you depict a poem... Verlena
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Date: 6/10/2015 11:32:00 AM
I don't understand the form either but I love your poem! "A poem should drown us as we take in breath." , wow, I think you just described the impact your poetry has on us, your adoring readers.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2015 5:02:00 PM
What a nice thing to say Monterey. Thanks.
Date: 6/9/2015 12:18:00 PM
Richard. Congratulations on your awesome win. HUGS **SKAT**
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Date: 6/8/2015 11:28:00 PM
a wonderful win Richard. LINDA
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Date: 6/8/2015 11:27:00 PM
well thank Goodness it is on the winners' list. Let me be the first to say CONGRATULATIONS.
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Date: 6/8/2015 11:26:00 PM
I think your poem followed the most closely that example that he had given us . Don't know how you placed but I think it deserved a high win. I really like this one. A few of the lines echoed my own thoughts on Ars Poetica!! (hmmm, I am not seeing congrats?? Did this not place??? Gotta go see!)
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Date: 6/8/2015 2:01:00 AM
How beautifully you have named those wonderful colors without which even the beauty of a very vivid and heavily loaded poem often gets dim. A7 for this sweet lovely creative write dear friend. I would make it a favorite one to keep in mind the essentials of a real good Poem. Love and best wishes always Richard ...Ravindra K Kapoor .
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2015 7:32:00 AM
Thanks Ravindra, a very thoughtful response to my poem.
Date: 6/7/2015 7:40:00 PM
Richard, this is such an inspirational write that provides a wonderful guideline for new poets as well as veterans. It is one that deserves to go to the Favs! Love it, my friend! Well done amd I rate it a solid "7!" Pandita
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/7/2015 7:49:00 PM
Thanks Pandita. Hugs Rick.
Date: 6/7/2015 6:33:00 PM
A poem should love and cry,.I so love this line. An excellent poem Richard. By the way , re your comment on my mac donalds gingle, Im going to Scotland in July,and now you got me all curious about the kilt : )
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/7/2015 7:30:00 PM
Ha ha! That makes me smile. Have a great trip!
Date: 6/7/2015 2:07:00 AM
This is more than 7 to me I really like your poem. Liquid life forming gill filtering our battle fear, a poem should be intoxicating as cutting as broken glass. Excellent write Richard........A.M.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/7/2015 8:29:00 AM
Thanks A.M. You are kind.
Date: 6/6/2015 10:18:00 PM
Richard, I love your flowing words, well done 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, bite me
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/7/2015 9:08:00 AM
Thanks Constance, hugs Rick.
Date: 6/6/2015 8:18:00 PM
When in doubt ''I do not know'' seems to be the logical form to put a piece under. In that I think it's more important that a poet is understood and your beautiful poem is one I'm sure most aspiring writers can relate to. Thanks for sharing Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/7/2015 9:09:00 AM
My pleasure Charles.
Date: 6/6/2015 9:28:00 AM
Love your take, Rick. "Liquid life forming gills" is an awesome line among really awesome ones. One is more alive than ever while being overwhelmed by the onslaught of feelings while putting them into words. A 7 and hugs! Kim
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Date: 6/5/2015 7:58:00 PM
The form, I don't know ether I'm still trying to find out what a poet and poems are. I do know, I like what you wrote.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/5/2015 8:47:00 PM
Thanks Milton, I appreciate the visit.
Date: 6/5/2015 4:50:00 PM
Well...understand the form or not this is fantastic....write more that may have you puzzled.....wow wow
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/5/2015 5:19:00 PM
Thanks Judy, that is an encouraging comment. I love the new profile picture, you have a lovely smile and happy eyes.
Date: 6/5/2015 2:52:00 PM
so true.. a poem should assault the senses, rich.. this is a marvelous piece.. huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/5/2015 5:39:00 PM
Thanks and hugs back.
Date: 6/5/2015 1:38:00 PM
I don't know what the form or prompt is but I like your creation. A poem should be smooth and flat as a jagged rock-I love that line!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/5/2015 5:40:00 PM
Thanks Angel Girl Cass!
Date: 6/5/2015 1:04:00 PM
Excellent write Rick.....poetry should evoke feelings as you so wonderfully described. Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/7/2015 10:51:00 PM
Thanks and a big hug back to you.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/7/2015 10:51:00 PM
Thanks and a big hug back to you.

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