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An Edgy Goodbye

An Edgy Goodbye I could use your concentration Just this one time relation This drink only lets the edge go But as to the rest, well...no I dont think its okay to be this way I dont know how long this will last But id like to know asap How to make it become the past Been trying to play it smart And just think im having a shortage of sugar But no matter the cure It dont work fast enough It dotn make it come soon enough For me to say "finally no more" And i think my other half thinks me boring But i got a lot of lazy things to do I got many books i need to read, and he isnt near anymore I feel like he forgot to give me the same key As he walked through some 'never to return' door

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Space Cadet

Date: 2/12/2017 5:22:00 PM

I like the flow and rhythm, the rhyme is creative. I like the title too. There's an extra key under a rock, next to the stairs, somewhere...Poem with something to say. Nice work and thanks for sharing. -- Wesley c.

Chris Green

Date: 11/16/2016 5:20:00 PM

That sounds very edgy to me and as if once that door is closed, it will never open again.

Adrea Sherman
Date: 11/16/2016 6:18:00 PM

Yes. I dont like things to stay "hanging". I see not making a permanent choice as living in the past, even if you are focusing your time on the present day. We have to pay attention to our natural personal feelings/thoughts as much as the feelings/thoughts from the stimulus of this world throw at us.