Alibis

Beauty cries in love's demise, when you make your alibis. All my sadness fills my eyes, when you make your alibis. Caring thoughts your voice implies, but the words are only lies still you sing sweet lullabies, when you make your alibis. Broken hearts will soon arise, different song but same reprise, though your stories you'll revise, when you make your alibis. Warm emotions, no goodbyes, loving feelings life denies, hate within beguiling guise, when you make your alibis. In your soul your heart implies, tenderness, I realize, willingly you still chastise, when you make your alibis. With grim desire R.J. sighs, as hope is lost, still he tries, Within his heart each dream dies, when you make your alibis. 03/12/16

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Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/29/2016 5:23:00 PM

Hi James, Congratulations on your win in the contest. Touches by the read James. It floats into my faves....Vlad.

James Inman
Date: 3/29/2016 7:17:00 PM

Thank you for the great comment Vlad. I'm flattered.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/27/2016 7:49:00 PM

Pashang was telling me that ghazals typically dwell around love, spiritual or more melancholy topics --- I wasn't originally aware of subject matter specifications, and just thought you could write them about anything really. The ones I end up writing somehow end up becoming more reflective or somber ... not sure why that is, perhaps it's just the nature of the refrain? And yes, I was quite impressed by the talent ... especially for a form very few seem to try on the Soup!

James Inman
Date: 3/29/2016 7:14:00 PM

Hey Timothy, not everything but most things I write tend to be on the darker side even if I write about cherry lollipops somewhere in the poem there will be a line like, "...from the cherry lollipop a viscous red drop drips slow from anguished lips as the blade moves deep across her wrist...," haha, and of course the dark chuckle has to accompany it. The ghazal I wrote for your contest was the first one I've done. My understanding of the form is that it is a poem written to give to someone you are attracted too which is the reason for adding your name, kind of like a "not so secret" admirer. I don't really write them because I hate putting my name in anything.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/27/2016 1:12:00 PM

Too late...lol, James... I just ate a chocolate bunny. I'm looking forward to eating cake in a few hours... Thanks for the reply. Linda

James Inman
Date: 3/27/2016 1:19:00 PM

My kinda girl!

Poet Destroyer A
Date: 3/27/2016 1:13:00 PM

I went straight for the ears....mmmm bunny ears ;)

Lin Lane

Date: 3/27/2016 9:46:00 AM

This was my favorite, James. Congratulations on placing in this contest.

James Inman
Date: 3/27/2016 10:22:00 AM

Thanks Lin, happy Easter.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/27/2016 9:38:00 AM

Happy Easter, James.... Congratulations on your win. Linda

James Inman
Date: 3/27/2016 10:21:00 AM

Thanks PD, and I hope your Easter is wonderful, be careful of the chocolate bunnies. They are sneaky creatures that will entice you to eat them then make you feel bad when there ears are gone.

Jan Allison

Date: 3/27/2016 8:49:00 AM

Really enjoyed your sad write James - great rhyming too:-) congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman
Date: 3/27/2016 10:19:00 AM

Thank you Jan, off to my sister in laws, enjoy your Easter.

Brian Davey

Date: 3/27/2016 2:03:00 AM

I love the added rhyme in each couplets first line also! Congrats on your placement!

James Inman
Date: 3/27/2016 10:17:00 AM

Thank you Brian, I enjoyed yours as well.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/26/2016 11:58:00 PM

Congrats James! I don't believe I've read a ghazal with this much added rhyme involved ... that is quite impressive, if I do say so myself. Excellently written. Thanks for entering my contest!

James Inman
Date: 3/27/2016 8:38:00 AM

Hi Timothy, though my subject matter is rather dark for a ghazal, I found it to be an enjoyable write. Thanks so much for hosting the contest. You have some wonderful writes here. A resounding success I would say.

Constance La France

Date: 3/17/2016 5:44:00 PM

James, a lovely phrasing of words, a captivating read, and I am loving it 7 ~

James Inman
Date: 3/17/2016 7:07:00 PM

Thank you BW, it's an interesting form, I rather enjoyed writing this.

Timothy Barry

Date: 3/14/2016 11:37:00 AM

Sad.

James Inman
Date: 3/14/2016 11:45:00 AM

Thanks for the visit Tim.