Aight?

come up ta my crib, he adlibbed bump bellies wid me, wid what god gived we’ll part da sheets likes Moses sea little mama we’ll be on a kissin spree we’ll drink some wine and smoke some grass invite in d’ crew and make some cash and by dat neon light shining dhey’ll be some booty reclining hell wid the flowers get the stash ‘fore the po po come ‘rest ‘ur **** bump jeans wid me baby y’ur so fine don’t pay no ‘tention to the line be my Baby Momma its aight maybe ‘ll take you home tonight *An inner city parody of Come Live with me and be my Love by Christopher Marlowe

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Mitch White

Date: 6/6/2010 3:57:00 AM

Dis iz Da bomb lol- Congrats De`b- have you heard `Baby Boy Da Prince`???

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/5/2010 9:38:00 PM

Just finally seeing who won in this one. I'd say you sure deseved to be in the circle. Congratulations,Deb!

Joyce Johnson

Date: 6/5/2010 8:41:00 AM

lCongratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/5/2010 5:40:00 AM

Congrats Debbie on your winning poem in the Parody contest with this exquisite write ..a well deserved win for my TEACH ... enjoy ..luv.. pupil..

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/5/2010 2:52:00 AM

Congrats on the win, Deborah

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 5/21/2010 1:27:00 PM

Cute concept Deb.Didn't figgah u for da inna city type but hey, fo' shizzle. Married life's good. We already act like we've been married for 20 years. Wasn't much of an adjustment for us to be honest. I'm a strong advocate of living together first for a few years. That way you get used to all the fun habits and quirks before you tie the knot.

Larry Belt

Date: 5/21/2010 12:37:00 PM

LOL Awesome......Larry

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/19/2010 7:55:00 PM

hahaha. you did this one RIGHT> I did not see too many that were actually parodies of that poem he showed us. Even mine was not quite "there" as this one is! I kind of strayed a bit from the topic but you kept it to new age love. Andrea

Amy Green

Date: 5/19/2010 5:46:00 PM

Pretty darn good! LOL

. Dabomb™

Date: 5/17/2010 5:26:00 PM

LOL, funny write, great parody!;)

Destiny Budd

Date: 5/17/2010 3:37:00 PM

Haha Funny thing is I can so see every bit of this. I'm not familiar with the other sonnet but yours alone is fantastic. The best of luck in the contest.

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 5/15/2010 6:03:00 PM

Hi Deb. Your talent is so diverse. You captured the dialect and the life styles of many people who live life by the wine, smoke, and arse. (Wink) Nice capture for this modern parody. Good luck in the contest. Love, Dane

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/15/2010 4:32:00 PM

I'll bet that one was hard to write...Good job...Good luck in the contest..Keep the creative pen flowing....Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara

Daniel Cheeseman

Date: 5/15/2010 2:41:00 AM

Loved this Deborah, bump jeans with me, loved it

Brian Strand

Date: 5/15/2010 12:23:00 AM

Nice take on the sonnet Debbie.Rgds Brian

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/14/2010 7:01:00 PM

BRAVO! Brilliante... as they say on the jewelry network... awesome and absolutely a winner..hope Nathan "gets it" ..this one is cool...gonna make it a fav so when my eyes clear up I can enjoy it all over again..luv.. oh ..I removed the dots............ my trademark ...bye bye for now..luv.. foggy pupil....luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/14/2010 6:52:00 PM

Thanks for supporting my poem. I first smiled and than laughed

Daniel Cwiak

Date: 5/14/2010 10:28:00 AM

I lived in the inner city and have heard some of the things you wrote! Keep up the work! Dan C

Jimmy Anderson

Date: 5/14/2010 8:08:00 AM

Hey Deb! A very nice write...hugs, Jimmy

Joe Flach

Date: 5/13/2010 9:09:00 PM

Nicely done Deborah. Reminds me of the scene in Airplane with the old lady who "talks jive". This should do very well in the contest. Thanks for the fun read. Joe

Joyce Johnson

Date: 5/13/2010 6:17:00 PM

Wow!! that's a far out one. Good luck. Love, Joyce

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/13/2010 6:09:00 PM

Well done D.G. sounds like music to my ears. How you been, take care,..p.d.