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A Vegetative State of Mind

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Some people exist in a vegetative state. This poem hopes to relate that.

My mouth’s in a cage, locked up and alone, Sewn shut with no one to speak to. My eyes have seen pain of mental torment, A broken mirror that sees straight through you. My ears are blocked to the screams and the cries, A sand grain alone on the beach. My skin’s now contorted to a dead cold bronze nothing, Not tanned in a figure of speech. My nose has been shattered to smells of a rose, To the smells of happy and free. My bones have been snapped, two pencils from one, My body is now wasting debris. My “me” has been broken, discarded and burnt, Once strong, now brittle and frail. My life is now cursed in this vegetative state, On a bed my mind’s locked in a jail.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 10/12/2016 4:21:00 PM
Congrats Lewis, for your well, deserved top placement in the contest!! ;-)
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Date: 10/12/2016 7:58:00 AM
Congratulations Lewis, awesome write:)
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Date: 10/11/2016 9:00:00 PM
Congrats, Lewis. Great job with this very difficult subject. Agnes
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Date: 10/11/2016 6:43:00 PM
Congratulations Lewis on the placement of the contest.
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Date: 6/22/2016 5:52:00 PM
wow. You write about some tough topics. Very good.
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Date: 6/14/2016 11:32:00 PM
Blind twilight in a splendour of metaphors ... an excellent write.... celebration of poetry....
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