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A Spec of Ash

Conceived against the blithe sunrise an ember sparks, in a mock disguise, tears beneath my lash Before I wipe away the burn, gray leaden clouds again will turn logic into ash __________________________________________________________ For the Contest Sponsored By Black Eyed Susan "Blue" 3/4/14

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Date: 3/28/2014 2:55:00 PM
This went beautifully... smooth... not to undermine the judge, not at all intending to but because it is all about personal preference, I'da thought this would have rated higher
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Carrie Richards
Date: 3/28/2014 9:02:00 PM
Thank you very much Amy. I'm just pleased that it placed, but appreciate your approval ! Thanks again!
Date: 3/25/2014 12:51:00 AM
Very lovely poem. Congratulations on a fine win, carrie
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Date: 3/24/2014 9:32:00 PM
Wow, I wish my brain worked like yours does..wonderful. BG
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Date: 3/24/2014 7:25:00 PM
A great little verse. Congratulations Carrie. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/24/2014 5:46:00 PM
a very interesting one, Carrie. SEems metaphorical to me. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 3/24/2014 3:15:00 PM
Wow, This is better than the placement you got. My opinion. You know what they say about those. Congrats for a great write Carrie.
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Date: 3/8/2014 2:17:00 PM
I love this poem and its imagery and choice of words. Brilliant. Best wishes Linda
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Date: 3/6/2014 8:39:00 PM
Oh, nice! I love the rhyme here, it adds a whole other level to your poem. I'm sorry I have not stopped by in a long while. I thank you for all your kind comments on my poetry.
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Date: 3/6/2014 11:28:00 AM
Disappointments are around every corner. Well stated.
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Date: 3/5/2014 4:22:00 AM
This poem transmits the 'blue ' feeling quite wel dear Carrie..I guess I have time to read another beauty of yours : ).. Here I gol
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