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A Solstice


God ... thoughts of death mourning a loss,
one after another, like falling hailstones cracking the tiles
of the substance of things not seen            but feared. I could care less
God ... it's the longest night of my years                   caught in the toils 
of doubts, of despair, of the sound of falling ice
that reverberates inside                                  my faith in sudden slices
and outside this pen for sheep-raising                          still in fertile soil
I fail to get over the fence without a stile

Impotent to kiss resignation's toes
advocated by those who want my obedience             and my tithes at all costs 
A version of the interpretation of the oral traditions already translated into lies
Greeks, Romans, Monarchs, Despots, Rulers, Reformists, Stoics... 

Impotent to listen to the duty of the silken stole
              that pulls my crackling faith into its coils
Impotent to accept sacred writings chosen by lot
Impotent of praying more and thinking less
Impotent to breathe, to see, to walk through wind-blown salt and s  i  l  t 
measuring a time ... dark and lost

God, a profuse bleeding from a ruptured soul                           refusing to clot
Thoughts of death like tears of ice

when the electrocardiogram yells  h     h     h 
                                                   e  p  e  p  e
                                                      l      l       l p ... Where will be the lice 
to suck my sins and tics?
to cough and gag and vomit my unfulfilled temptations into a cist? 

My time of death has expired long time ago. Do you noticed it?
                                                            do you care about it?

Thoughts of death tickling upon my bare soles
I'll be nobody without a tag swaying from my toe

The night at its farthest point from                      the Sun and still so close
I need to believe it
God ... You need to believe it
I can kill you if my faith is lost 


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  1. Date: 8/1/2014 8:10:00 AM
    Very intense write my friend... A poet's spirit in that one for sure! Big congrats on a great write and fine win!!!

  1. Date: 8/1/2014 2:25:00 AM
    Hi Ruben. Congratulations xx

  1. Date: 7/31/2014 11:16:00 AM
    Interesting and lovely write,Ruben...Congrats on your win...

  1. Date: 7/31/2014 9:25:00 AM
    Wow Ruben that's an amazing write ! Congrats on huge win!

  1. Date: 3/22/2014 4:09:00 PM
    Impressive! Congrats Ruben :-) Love, Su

  1. Date: 3/21/2014 7:25:00 AM
    It was a pleasure to read your best and favorite poem. Congrats on the win, Ruben

  1. Date: 2/4/2014 6:23:00 AM
    Wonderful poem, your favorite one. Congrats on the win, Ruben

  1. Date: 2/3/2014 9:34:00 PM
    YIKES!! This would be really depressing were it not for the substance of things not seen but feared. Beautiful write, so glad I read it! Namaste ~N

  1. Date: 2/3/2014 9:15:00 PM
    It is great free verse and nothing like a theme like death to versify in such intensity, a big congrats on your first place, Ruben!!

  1. Date: 2/3/2014 8:09:00 PM
    Ruben, it's no wonder I see your poem at the top of the list. This is a masterpiece from you. BIG congratulations. I just knew you had to be in this contest.

  1. Date: 2/3/2014 5:35:00 PM
    it is a pleasure to see you at the top of my winners' list mr hat o! and it is thoroughly deserved, this is excellent free verse, original, innovative, much to ponder in this, so fave line is "pulls my crackling faith into its coils" - congrats on your win in my contest! :)

  1. Date: 2/3/2014 4:43:00 PM
    I wish you'd start writing again, it's such a same when you can write like this that you don't. I miss your free verse. Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

  1. Date: 11/30/2012 2:03:00 PM
    Soup mail!!

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 6:11:00 PM
    I exhort you to seek His will, to believe God and not man. If God is far from your heart than invite Him over, but if He is close than don't let go because all the answers lie within you my friend. - Dio

  1. Date: 11/27/2012 5:47:00 PM
    I see Ruben!! Apostasy sometimes comes from disgusting experiences. What man touches, man corrupts!! I do agree in a few things you mention, like greed and hunger for power and control - But instead of following man, we should follow God's will. Now ask your self what is God's will? You are at a breaking point my friend - and we cannot be fix if we have not being broken yet! God turns for good what the devil try to use for evil. - Dio

  1. Date: 11/21/2012 3:39:00 PM
    Do not lose your faith, sweet man. An awesome poem, Ruben, I could really feel the hopelessness of it all. you are such an awesome writer. Love and hugs, catie :)

  1. Date: 11/19/2012 1:52:00 AM
    and its a haiku,no scary senryu in my last post,Inspired by a scary movie :

  1. Date: 11/19/2012 1:45:00 AM
    AWESOME TO READ THIS GEM AGAIN.Christina is doing great,with all her daily demands i end up exhausted,yet joyfully exhausted :),tnks for asking.Regards to Cami an Beatriz

  1. Date: 9/6/2012 3:53:00 PM
    Ditto awesome and it's a dern shame more Free Verse is NOT highlighted on this site..too many great metaphors to list in my opinion this is even better than the other you were entering John's contest..I wouldn't be your Debbie-Do, I'd lose my HM title if I didn't let you know 8th line from the bottom [cyst] Light & Love Mr. O

    Guzzi Avatar Debbie Guzzi
    Date: 9/6/2012 3:53:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    hey whatcha win with this I musta missed it?
  1. Date: 7/3/2012 4:07:00 PM
    Awesome write,,, I can see why you won,,, congratulations ;}