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A Mind Disturbed

A mind puzzled by distortions around, To extreme patters like vast stars when burst. It spins abstracted in squares, all around; Like a wild beast dying of utmost thirst. Thoughts spin like a large spiral galaxy. Words mixed up, locked in the back of the mind. Life swings like stones defying gravity, Carried around the world by the north wind. Will you revive the memories so fond? Laid on a bed of undying roses? Will you thrive to bring back the divine bond? Before this disturbed mind ride six horses? Upon dreams beyond imagination, The restless mind awaits your affection.

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/29/2014 8:52:00 AM

- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Hasan - I choose your first lovely sonnet poem - Well done - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- Be kind and keep PoetrySoup as a haven PoetrySoup is a drama free zone(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Hasan Hilmy
Date: 8/29/2014 9:51:00 AM

Thanks a lot Anne... I feel like in a whole new world now

Skat A

Date: 8/27/2014 8:12:00 PM

Hasan, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile, others passed, when I first join the soup 4 years ago. I wish you the best when it comes to your compositions. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Hasan Hilmy
Date: 8/28/2014 10:14:00 AM

Thank you SKAT. Will do that :-) *HUGS*

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/27/2014 9:28:00 AM

Hasan, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the community. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I'm looking forward to following you and your poetry:) Here's the link to the contest page. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/ <---~Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@"

Me Me

Date: 8/27/2014 9:05:00 AM

Awesome poem Hasan! I'm not sure that I understand the riding of six horses, but it certainly adds to the mystery of the work that you've created! ~Sam

Me Me
Date: 8/27/2014 9:36:00 AM

For a first poem, you did awesome! Great job rising up to the challenge! On the subject of horses, you now have me intrigued, I'll be waiting and watching for more on/of them!

Hasan Hilmy
Date: 8/27/2014 9:08:00 AM

Thank you Sam. The six horses is actually a mystery that can only be understood from my journals. This is my first Sonnet and it was challenging.